Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more grammatical, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., “uplifting” instead of “motivating”, “help me cope” instead of “can shed and cope with my feeling”).

예시: I prefer different types of music depending on my mood. For example, when I’m happy I listen to upbeat pop or dance tracks because they’re uplifting and make me feel energetic. However, when I’m sad I choose slow, melancholic songs to reflect my feelings and help me calm down.

제안: Provide a clear, direct answer first, then support it with a concise example. Fix grammar (use present simple: “happy music usually makes me feel energetic”) and avoid unclear words. Use linking words like “for example” or “as a result”.

예시: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more excited and energetic. For example, when I hear upbeat pop songs I often feel like dancing and it lifts my mood, so I prefer listening to them before I exercise or meet friends.

제안: Answer directly, correct vocabulary and grammar, and give one or two specific details about the class. Replace unclear words (e.g., “Cameras”) and use past tense for past activities. Mention what you learned and a result. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I took music classes at university and I was a member of the campus choir. I studied vocal techniques and basic music theory, which improved my singing and gave me confidence to perform in front of friends.

제안: Start with a clear yes/no or short topic sentence, then give a specific example. Correct phrases and verb forms (e.g., “make the time pass more quickly”, “when I’m doing chores or studying”). Explain the benefit concisely and use linking words like “for example” or “so”.

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things because it makes time pass more quickly and helps me concentrate. For example, when I’m doing household chores or studying, I play upbeat songs which improve my mood and help me stay focused.

× When I'm very happy, I prefer to listen motivating or upbeat music such as pop or dance music that make me energetic.

✓ When I'm very happy, I prefer to listen to motivating or upbeat music, such as pop or dance music, that makes me energetic.

Missing 'to' after 'listen' requires the infinitive; 'motivating' is fine as an adjective but needs 'to listen to'. Also subject 'music' is singular so verb should be 'makes' (subject-verb agreement). Use commas to separate the example phrase.

× But when I'm sad, I like to listen to slow and sad music that can shed and cope with my feeling.

✓ But when I'm sad, I like to listen to slow, sad music that can help me cope with my feelings.

'Shed' is incorrect in this context; use 'help' + verb to express assistance. 'Cope with' requires an object 'my feelings' (plural). Also use comma to combine adjectives 'slow, sad'.

× Definitely the happiness is usually give me energetic and activated.

✓ Definitely, happiness usually makes me feel energetic and active.

Tense and verb forms were incorrect: 'give me energetic and activated' should be 'makes me feel energetic and active'. Use 'makes' for third person singular subject 'happiness'. 'Active' is the correct adjective rather than 'activated'.

× For example, when I listen link to upbeat music that's Regent can make me want to dance things here, so I like happy music.

✓ For example, when I listen to upbeat music, it makes me want to dance, so I like happy music.

This sentence had extra words ('link', 'that's Regent', 'things here') that confuse meaning. Use 'listen to upbeat music' and a clear subject 'it' with verb 'makes me want to dance'. Remove irrelevant fragments.

× Definitely during my university time, I'm a member of Cameras.

✓ During my university years, I was a member of a chorus.

Tense should be past ('was') to match 'during my university years'. 'Cameras' is likely incorrect; 'chorus' or 'choir' fits context. Use 'years' rather than 'time' and add article 'a'.

× I usually have a music class with special music student.

✓ I usually had music classes with other music students.

Preposition and plurality: use past 'had' for past timeframe, 'classes' plural and 'other music students' as the correct noun phrase. 'With' is fine but 'other' clarifies colleagues.

× It's giving me more special skills about music and then I can have more confidence to singing in front of my friends.

✓ It gave me more specific musical skills and increased my confidence to sing in front of my friends.

Use past tense 'gave' to match timeframe. 'Specific' is better than 'special skills about music'. Use 'confidence to sing' (infinitive) rather than 'to singing'.

× Definitely when I'm doing some boring tasks I like listening to music to make the charm past more quickly.

✓ Definitely, when I'm doing boring tasks, I like listening to music to make the time pass more quickly.

'Make the charm past' is incorrect; the idiom is 'make the time pass'. Use 'time' and verb 'pass'. Also add commas for clarity.

× For example, when I doing charts or supporting, I like listening to music and then to lift my mouth and help me perform better.

✓ For example, when I'm doing chores or doing support tasks, I like listening to music because it lifts my mood and helps me perform better.

Fix verb form 'when I'm doing' and correct 'charts' to 'chores' or appropriate word. 'To lift my mouth' is incorrect; use 'lifts my mood'. Match verbs: 'helps me perform better'.