Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar (plural/singular, articles), fluency (reduce hesitations), and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use correct forms: 'sad music' not 'sad musics', and say why with specific examples (when stressed, to reflect emotions).

예시: I prefer sad music to happy music because it is slower and more emotional. For example, when I am stressed after a long day, I listen to mellow ballads because they help me relax and reflect. Therefore, sad songs are my go-to for calming down.

제안: Work on natural expressions and coherence. Avoid literal translations like 'over the moon' without context and correct grammar (verb forms, pronouns). Make a clear contrast using linking words (however, but) and give a short reason or example for the unexpected reaction.

예시: Happy music usually makes me feel upbeat and energetic. However, sometimes fast, repetitive songs make me feel tired rather than energized because they can be overwhelming. For instance, after listening to very loud pop music for a long time, I sometimes lose motivation to study.

제안: Use correct verb tenses and complete sentences. Start with a direct answer, then add specific reasons and an example. Avoid incomplete clauses and be concise about feelings (e.g., 'I feel shy performing in front of others').

예시: No, I have never taken music classes because I do not feel confident about singing or playing instruments. For example, I feel shy performing in front of a group, so I never enrolled in lessons. Maybe in the future I would try a beginner class to build confidence.

제안: Clarify your meaning and complete your thoughts. Answer directly, then give specific examples of activities and explain how music helps using linking words (for example, because, so). Avoid vague or unfinished sentences.

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other tasks because it makes activities more enjoyable and helps me concentrate. For example, I play soft instrumental music while studying because it reduces distractions, and I listen to upbeat songs while exercising to keep my pace steady.

× Actually, I'm really keen on sad musics and happy one because sad musics are more slower and emotional.

✓ Actually, I'm really keen on sad music and happy music because sad music is slower and more emotional.

Use uncountable 'music' rather than plural 'musics'. Match number: 'sad music' singular with singular verb 'is'. Also correct comparative order: 'slower and more emotional' (use 'more' with adjective 'emotional'). Avoid repeating 'one'—use 'happy music' for parallel structure.

× Uh, I always listen to when I am stressed, uh, because it helps me express.

✓ I always listen to it when I am stressed because it helps me express myself.

Missing object: 'listen to' requires an object ('it'). Add reflexive pronoun 'myself' after 'express'. Remove unnecessary filler words and keep present tense consistent.

× To be honest, I frequently over the moon when I listen to happy music, but I uh, sometimes suffered from uh, happy music because uh, it uh, reduce my energy instead of boost them.

✓ To be honest, I am frequently over the moon when I listen to happy music, but I sometimes suffer from happy music because it reduces my energy instead of boosting it.

Use appropriate verb forms: the idiom 'be over the moon' needs the verb 'am'. Use present simple 'suffer' for habitual action, not past 'suffered'. Use third-person singular 'reduces' to match singular subject 'it', and use gerund 'boosting' after 'instead of'. Match pronoun 'it' to 'music' (singular) not 'them'.

× No, I have never taken any music classes and even I have never think about that because I'm not good at singing music or playing any musical instrument.

✓ No, I have never taken any music classes and I have never thought about that because I'm not good at singing or playing any musical instrument.

Use present perfect 'have never thought' (past participle 'thought') after 'have'. Remove redundant 'music' after 'singing' (singing already implies music). Keep parallel structure: 'singing or playing'.

× I always feel shy when I engaging a group of.

✓ I always feel shy when I engage with a group.

Incorrect verb form 'engaging' should be finite 'engage' to follow 'when'. Add preposition 'with' and complete noun 'a group' to form a coherent clause.

× Of course I always telling something when I listen to music because it helps me make life more easier.

✓ Of course I am always talking about something when I listen to music because it helps make life easier.

Use correct continuous form 'am always talking' not 'always telling'. 'Tell' needs an object; 'talk about something' fits. 'More easier' is incorrect — use 'easier' (comparative 'more' not used with '-er' adjective). Remove extra 'me' after 'helps' for natural phrasing.

× For example, when you listen to music, you have another 5.

✓ For example, when you listen to music, you get five more minutes of focus.

Original sentence is incomplete and unclear ('you have another 5'). Provide a clear, complete idea appropriate to context. If intended meaning differs, replace with specific measurable benefit; here 'five more minutes of focus' is a plausible completion.