Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答をもっと自然で文法的に正しい英語に直し、理由を具体的に2つ程度述べてください。例えば「happy music makes me feel relaxed and motivated to do activities such as studying or exercising」のように、主語と動詞の一致、時制、前置詞の使い方を正しくしてください。また、同じ表現の繰り返しを避け、文は3〜4文に収めて簡潔に説明しましょう。

예시: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and helps me relax. For example, when I listen to upbeat songs I feel more motivated to study and exercise. Because of this, I usually choose happy music when I need energy or focus.

제안: 答えは短くて分かりやすくまとめ、理由を論理的に説明してください。テンポや身体的反応（心拍の増加）を述べるのは良いですが、文法（動詞の形、冠詞、接続詞）を正してつなぎを自然にしてください。接続詞（for example, because, so）を使って文と文をつなげましょう。

예시: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more excited because it has a faster tempo. For example, upbeat songs make my heart beat faster and give me more energy, so I feel more alert and ready to do things.

제안: まず文法を直して簡潔に答え、その後に理由と具体的な目標を示してください。「I haven't taken any」や「my school doesn't have music classes」など正しい表現を使い、ギターを弾きたい理由を明確に述べましょう。また、冗長な言い回しを避けて1〜3文にまとめてください。

예시: No, I haven't taken any music classes because my school doesn't offer them. However, I would like to learn the guitar so that I can play my favorite songs and maybe accompany myself when singing.

제안: 冗長な繰り返しを避け、理由を明確に述べてください。例えば「I listen to music while studying because it makes studying more enjoyable and helps me concentrate」のように、目的や効果を具体的に説明しましょう。発話の流れを良くするために接続詞を使い、文は2〜3文以内に収めてください。

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while studying because it makes the work more enjoyable. When I play my favorite songs, I feel relaxed and more focused, so I can study for longer periods.

× I prefer happy music because happy music making me happy and relaxing and make to I want to something for example study, exercise and job.

✓ I prefer happy music because happy music makes me happy, relaxes me, and makes me want to do things such as studying, exercising, and working.

Subject-verb agreement and verb forms: 'happy music making me' is incorrect; use 'happy music makes me' for third-person singular. Parallel verb forms required: use 'relaxes me' rather than 'relaxing'. 'make to I want to something' is ungrammatical; use 'makes me want to do something' and list gerunds for activities. Suggestion: ensure the subject and verb agree (music makes), use correct verb forms, and maintain parallel structure in lists. Grammar Problem Type ID: 27

× Yeah, happy music make me feel more excited because happy music mostly.

✓ Yeah, happy music makes me feel more excited because it is mostly upbeat.

Third-person singular: 'happy music make' should be 'happy music makes' because 'music' is singular. 'because happy music mostly' is incomplete; clarify with 'because it is mostly upbeat' or similar. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with singular subjects and complete clauses when giving reasons. Grammar Problem Type ID: 2

× Happy music is fast music. Tempo is fast because I feel 1st and my heart heartbeat is faster.

✓ Happy music is fast. The tempo is quick, so I feel energized and my heartbeat gets faster.

Article and sentence structure: 'Tempo is fast' is acceptable but improved with 'The tempo is quick.' 'because I feel 1st' is unclear and ungrammatical; likely intended 'I feel energized' or 'I feel excited.' 'my heart heartbeat' is redundant; use 'my heartbeat' or 'my heart beats faster.' Suggestion: avoid redundancy and use clear expressions for physical reactions. Grammar Problem Type ID: 26

× No, I haven't goes.

✓ No, I haven't taken any.

Incorrect auxiliary use and verb form: 'haven't goes' mixes present perfect auxiliary 'have' with base verb 'goes' and wrong form. Use past participle after 'have' ('taken'). Suggestion: after 'have/has', use past participle form of the main verb. Grammar Problem Type ID: 9

× My school has not music class, but I want to play guitar because if I have guitar I can pray anything music anything music guitar.

✓ My school does not have music classes, but I want to play the guitar because if I had a guitar I could play any music.

Article and verb usage: 'has not music class' should be 'does not have music classes.' Use plural 'classes' or 'a music class.' 'play guitar' can be 'play the guitar.' Conditional form: 'if I have guitar I can pray' is wrong: use 'if I had a guitar I could play any music.' Also 'pray' is incorrect for 'play.' Suggestion: use correct negation with 'does not have', include articles for instruments, and use correct conditional/modal verbs and vocabulary. Grammar Problem Type ID: 11

× Yes, I do. Uh, I listen to music while studying because I, I hate study. But if I, I, if I listen my favorite song, I feel good. Yeah.

✓ Yes, I do. I listen to music while studying because I hate studying. But if I listen to my favorite song, I feel good.

Gerund and preposition use: 'I hate study' should be 'I hate studying' (use gerund after 'hate'). 'if I listen my favorite song' needs the preposition 'to' after 'listen.' Remove filler repetitions. Suggestion: use gerunds for activities (studying), include 'to' with 'listen to', and avoid unnecessary repetition. Grammar Problem Type ID: 8