Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn, tránh lặp từ và ngữ pháp sai. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó giải thích lý do với chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: cảm xúc hoặc kỷ niệm liên quan). Giữ tối đa 3-4 câu, dùng liên từ phù hợp (because, so, when) và sửa lỗi thì/động từ.

예시: I prefer sad music. I find it comforting because it matches my mood and helps me reflect on my feelings. For example, when I'm upset I like slow ballads since they calm me down.

제안: Câu trả lời cần thẳng thắn nhưng chính xác về ngữ pháp. Tránh dùng các cụm từ thiếu hoàn chỉnh như "doesn't really good". Nên nêu quan điểm rõ ràng, giải thích ngắn gọn vì sao và có thể đưa ví dụ cụ thể. Sử dụng một hoặc hai câu hỗ trợ với liên từ (because, so).

예시: No, happy music doesn't usually excite me. I tend to listen to music when I'm sad because the lyrics and slower tempo help me process my emotions.

제안: Câu trả lời rõ ràng nhưng hơi dài và lặp ý. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề (No, I haven't), rồi nêu lý do ngắn gọn (no talent, only informal singing). Tránh dùng "I would never" quá tuyệt đối; dùng ngôn ngữ mềm hơn và cung cấp một ví dụ chi tiết (ví dụ: hát trong phòng tắm giúp thư giãn). Giữ 2-3 câu.

예시: No, I haven't taken any music classes. I'm not very confident in my musical ability and usually just sing in the shower to relax, so I never felt the need for lessons.

제안: Cần cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp/word order. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề (Yes, I often listen to music while...), rồi nêu lợi ích và hạn chế với liên từ (however, but). Tránh câu ngắt quãng như "Honestly." và cụm từ mơ hồ ("doing this"). Thêm ví dụ cụ thể (loại nhạc, khi nào mất tập trung).

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while I study or do household tasks. However, it can sometimes make me lose focus, especially with songs that have strong vocals, so I prefer instrumental music when I need to concentrate.

× I listen both them but personally I prefer sad music because when I'm I'm sad I also listen sad music.

✓ I listen to both of them, but personally I prefer sad music because when I'm sad I also listen to sad music.

Use 'listen to' with the preposition 'to'; 'both' should be followed by 'of them' in this context; avoid repeated 'I'm'; include 'to' before the object 'sad music' when using 'listen'. Suggestions: Practice collocations like 'listen to', remove duplicate words, and use 'both of them' for clarity.

× To be honest, no happy music doesn't really good for me. I only turn to my music when I'm sad.

✓ To be honest, no, happy music doesn't really sound good to me. I only turn to my music when I'm sad.

Add a comma after 'no' to separate the response; use the verb 'sound' with adjectives describing how music seems; include the preposition 'to' in 'good to me'. Suggestions: Use appropriate verbs like 'sound' or 'make me feel' with adjectives describing music.

× Not really, I don't think I'm really musically talented, I just sing in shower or when I'm feeling down. I have never thought about becoming a singer so I would never consider taking any music classes.

✓ Not really. I don't think I'm very musically talented; I just sing in the shower or when I'm feeling down. I have never thought about becoming a singer, so I would never consider taking any music classes.

Add articles ('the shower'); replace 'really' with 'very' for naturalness; use punctuation to separate ideas (period or semicolon); add a comma before 'so' that introduces a result. Suggestions: Use 'the shower', vary adverbs appropriately, and punctuate to separate independent clauses.

× Actually I usually play it while doing this or studying in.

✓ Actually I usually play it while doing this or while studying.

Remove incorrect preposition 'in' after 'studying'; repeat 'while' for parallel structure or restructure the sentence. Suggestions: Use parallel structure for coordinated activities and avoid unnecessary prepositions.

× Many people say that's listening to music while studying is bad but I find it's quite interesting.

✓ Many people say that listening to music while studying is bad, but I find it quite helpful.

Replace 'that's' with 'that' as a complementizer; remove redundant 'is' after 'listening'; add a comma before 'but' joining two independent clauses; 'interesting' is acceptable but 'helpful' is more natural here. Suggestions: Use 'that' to introduce noun clauses and include commas before coordinating conjunctions joining clauses.

× Honestly. Sometimes it's still that music make me lose focus a bit, but when I'm just copying it's an amazing choice so.

✓ Honestly, sometimes music still makes me lose focus a bit, but when I'm just copying it's an amazing choice.

Combine fragments into one sentence; use third person singular 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'music'; remove 'that' which is unnecessary; drop trailing 'so' at end of sentence. Suggestions: Ensure subject-verb agreement and avoid sentence fragments and unnecessary words.