Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct, grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “I prefer happy music.”), then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Use correct tense and word forms (e.g., “it makes me feel excited,” “I usually listen to cheerful songs at parties”). Avoid filler words and repetition.

예시: I prefer happy music because it makes me feel energetic and upbeat. For example, at parties I usually choose lively pop or dance songs because their strong rhythm helps me relax and enjoy myself.

제안: Answer directly and expand with a clear reason and a specific example. Use correct verb forms and avoid hesitations. Connect ideas with linking words such as “because” and “for example.” Finish your sentence fully.

예시: Yes, absolutely. Happy, upbeat music makes me feel more excited because the fast tempo increases my energy. For example, before going out I play upbeat tracks to get in a lively mood.

제안: Be concise and give a short reason using natural phrasing. Use correct expressions for purpose and preference (e.g., “I haven't taken formal classes because I prefer listening as a hobby”). Add a brief detail to enrich the answer.

예시: No, I haven't taken any music classes because I prefer to enjoy music casually. I listen to a lot of songs and sometimes learn pieces on my own, but I haven't studied music formally.

제안: Clarify the situations when you listen to music and use accurate collocations (e.g., “listen to music while studying/working/commuting”). Avoid unrelated or contradictory phrases (e.g., parties and concentration). Give a clear example and link it with a reason.

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other activities. For example, I listen to instrumental or lo-fi music while studying to help me concentrate, and I play upbeat songs when I exercise or commute to boost my energy.

× I prefer happy music like a beat song so because.

✓ I prefer happy music, like upbeat songs.

The original has redundant connectives and incorrect word order ('like a beat song so because'). This is a sentence structure error: remove unnecessary fillers ('so because') and use the correct adjective 'upbeat' and plural 'songs' to match general preference. Suggestion: keep sentences concise and place modifiers next to the noun they describe.

× It a bit so excited me, so when I go to party I used to go cheerful music.

✓ It makes me a bit excited, so when I go to a party I usually listen to cheerful music.

Errors include missing verb ('It a bit so excited me'), incorrect use of 'used to' for habitual present ('I used to go cheerful music'), and missing articles. Correct with present simple 'makes' for current reactions and 'usually listen' for habitual action. Use 'a party' and 'cheerful music'.

× So the happy music like uh, shuffle music or upbeat music make me feel more excited.

✓ So happy music, like shuffle music or upbeat music, makes me feel more excited.

Subject-verb agreement requires 'makes' (third person singular) because the subject 'happy music' is treated as a singular idea. Also remove filler 'uh' in formal responses and add commas around the example phrase.

× So when I go to party, I sometimes used to listen to the music to upgrade my.

✓ So when I go to a party, I sometimes listen to music to lift my mood.

'Used to' implies a past habitual action; here the speaker means a present habitual action, so use 'sometimes listen'. Also 'to upgrade my' is incomplete — supply the noun 'mood' and remove 'the' before 'music'. Add article 'a party'.

× Uh, because I don't want to run the formal music.

✓ I don't want to take formal music lessons.

The phrase 'run the formal music' is incorrect. Use 'take formal music lessons' to express not wanting to study music formally. This fixes verb choice and adds the correct noun phrase.

× I just like listening the music as a hobby.

✓ I just like listening to music as a hobby.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object. Also omit the definite article 'the' because speaking about music in general.

× Yeah, I recently busy while doing other things.

✓ Yes, I have been busy recently while doing other things.

The original lacks a verb. Use present perfect continuous 'have been busy' to convey recent ongoing state. Also place 'recently' after the auxiliary or at sentence end for natural word order.

× For example, when I go to the party, I listen to upbeat music to improve my concentration.

✓ For example, when I go to a party, I listen to upbeat music to improve my concentration.

Change 'the party' to 'a party' unless referring to a specific party. The rest is acceptable. This fixes article usage (preposition-related/ article error).