Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more concise, correct grammar, and vary vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific reason with a brief example. Avoid repetition and fix articles and verb forms (e.g., "an energetic vibe", "I feel").

예시: I prefer happy music. It gives me an energetic vibe and helps me stay motivated while I work; for example, upbeat pop songs make long study sessions feel less tiring.

제안: Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, tense) and be specific about feelings. Use linking words to connect reason and example. Avoid unclear phrases like "freshy" and "fully involved in that music lyrics."

예시: Yes, it does. When I listen to upbeat songs I feel more energetic because I focus on the melody and lyrics, which lifts my mood—for instance, a cheerful chorus can brighten a slow afternoon.

제안: Use correct grammar for negative past ("I haven't taken any music classes") and organize the answer: state clearly, then give specific self-study activities. Avoid awkward phrases and unclear references (e.g., "singing with the lady").

예시: No, I haven't taken formal music classes, but I often teach myself by listening to my favorite albums. For example, I practice singing along to love songs and occasional spiritual tracks to improve my voice.

제안: Make the answer concise and correct grammar ("while I do other things", "it improves my focus"). Give one clear reason and a brief example of activities you do while listening to music. Avoid repeating phrases like "very, very".

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while I work or clean. It improves my focus and energy—for example, upbeat playlists help me finish chores faster and keep me motivated during study sessions.

× To be very honest, I prefer happy music.

✓ To be very honest, I prefer happy music.

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× This is because it gives me a energetic vibe and feeling more excited while I'm doing work.

✓ This is because it gives me an energetic vibe and makes me feel more excited while I am working.

The indefinite article 'a' should be followed by an adjective starting with a consonant sound; 'energetic' is correct but needed 'an' not 'a'. Also the sentence used a noun phrase 'feeling more excited' awkwardly and missing a verb; use 'makes me feel more excited' and prefer 'working' instead of 'doing work' for natural usage. Suggestion: Use 'an energetic vibe' and 'makes me feel more excited while I am working.'

× So it is a very crucial part of my life when I'm doing something.

✓ So it is a very important part of my life when I am doing something.

'Very crucial' is redundant and informal; 'crucial' already implies importance. Also 'when I'm doing something' is vague but acceptable; change 'very crucial' to 'very important' for naturalness. Suggestion: Use 'important' or simply 'crucial' without 'very.'

× Yes, of course happy music make me feel more excited.

✓ Yes, of course happy music makes me feel more excited.

Subject-verb agreement: 'music' is a singular noun so the verb needs third person singular form 'makes.' Also consider comma after 'of course' for clarity. Suggestion: 'Yes, of course, happy music makes me feel more excited.'

× This is because when I listen to happy music I fully involved in that music lyrics and I feel very special.

✓ This is because when I listen to happy music I become fully involved in the lyrics and I feel very special.

After 'I' the past participle 'involved' was used without auxiliary; need 'become fully involved' or 'I am fully involved.' Also 'that music lyrics' is incorrect—use 'the lyrics' or 'the song's lyrics.' Suggestion: 'I become fully involved in the lyrics.'

× So it is a very more freshy thing for me when I was feel little bit of in my day.

✓ So it is a very refreshing thing for me when I feel a little down in my day.

'Very more' is ungrammatical; use 'very' or 'more' not both. 'Freshy' is not a correct adjective; use 'refreshing.' Tense 'was feel' is wrong; should be present 'feel.' Also 'little bit of' needs noun—use 'a little down' to mean slightly sad. Suggestion: 'a very refreshing thing for me when I feel a little down.'

× No, I not taken any music classes but in particular I just listening and repeated to myself in my favorite music albums like love songs, party songs and little bit of spiritual songs that I like to singing with the lady.

✓ No, I have not taken any music classes, but I listen to and repeat songs from my favorite albums, such as love songs, party songs, and some spiritual songs that I like to sing along with female singers.

Verb tense and form errors: 'I not taken' needs present perfect 'I have not taken.' 'I just listening and repeated' mixes tenses and forms; use parallel verbs 'listen to and repeat.' 'Repeated to myself' is awkward—'repeat songs' or 'sing along.' 'Little bit of spiritual songs' should be 'some spiritual songs.' 'like to singing' should be 'like to sing' or 'like singing.' Also 'with the lady' is unclear; clarified as 'with female singers' or 'with the singer.' Suggestion: Use present perfect for experiences and parallel verb forms: 'I have not taken any music classes, but I listen to and repeat songs...'

× Yes, definitely. I listen to music while I doing other things.

✓ Yes, definitely. I listen to music while I am doing other things.

Progressive tense requires auxiliary 'am' before the present participle: 'I am doing.' Without it the sentence is ungrammatical. Suggestion: Use 'I listen to music while I am doing other things.'

× This is because it improve my focus and my all the energy in that work and I feel more excited and fresh while I'm doing something.

✓ This is because it improves my focus and channels all my energy into the work, and I feel more excited and refreshed while I am doing something.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it improve' should be 'it improves.' 'my all the energy' has wrong word order and article use; use 'channels all my energy' or 'gives me energy.' 'Fresh' should be adjective 'refreshed' to describe feeling. Also use 'I am doing' for progressive. Suggestion: 'It improves my focus and channels all my energy into the work, and I feel more excited and refreshed.'

× So it is a very, very favorite part of my day.

✓ So it is a very favorite part of my day.

'Very, very favorite' is exaggerated and unusual in formal speech; 'very favorite' is also awkward—better: 'one of my favorite parts of the day' or 'a favorite part of my day.' Suggestion: Use 'one of my favorite parts of the day.'