Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with small grammar and word-choice errors and tighten phrasing to sound more natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Correct minor mistakes such as 'cheer for' → 'cheerful' and avoid repeating ideas.

예시: I prefer happy, upbeat music because it lifts my mood. For example, when I'm working or exercising I usually play cheerful pop or dance tracks because they keep me motivated and energetic.

제안: Fix subject-verb agreement and remove repetitions. Combine short sentences using linking words to improve flow. Include one specific example to illustrate when and why it excites you.

예시: Yes, it does. Happy music makes me feel more excited and cheerful, so when I'm exercising or doing focused work I choose upbeat tracks to boost my energy and concentration.

제안: This response is inappropriate and does not answer the question. Provide a direct topic sentence stating whether you have taken classes, then add a brief supporting detail (what you learned or why not). Keep it natural and concise.

예시: No, I haven't taken formal music classes, but I learned to play the guitar from online tutorials and practice regularly to improve my skills.

제안: Good content and clear example; improve phrasing and a couple of small errors ('go for work' → 'commute to work'). Use one linking word to connect idea and reason smoothly.

예시: Yes, I usually listen to music while doing other things; for instance, during my commute to work I prefer acoustic or mellow tracks because they help me relax and concentrate.

× For example, I often listen to cheer for pop or dance tracks when I'm working or exercising because they help me stay motivated and energetic.

✓ For example, I often listen to cheerful pop or dance tracks when I'm working or exercising because they help me stay motivated and energetic.

The word 'cheer' is a noun or verb, not an adjective; the correct adjective form is 'cheerful'. Use the adjective to modify 'pop or dance tracks'. Suggestion: replace incorrect word with its adjective form to describe the music.

× Yes, it does. Happy music make me feel more excited and cheerful.

✓ Yes, it does. Happy music makes me feel more excited and cheerful.

Subject 'Happy music' is treated as singular (uncountable noun for a kind of music), so the verb requires third person singular agreement 'makes' not 'make'. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with singular subject by adding -s.

× I often listen happy music when I I'm exercising and doing work.

✓ I often listen to happy music when I'm exercising and doing work.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' before its object ('listen to music'). Also there is a duplicated auxiliary 'I I'm' — the extra 'I' should be removed. Suggestion: include 'to' after 'listen' and delete the duplicated 'I'.

× Have you taken any music classes? Student: Hello.

✓ Have you taken any music classes? Student: No, I haven't taken any music classes.

The student's reply 'Hello.' does not answer the examiner's question and lacks relevant content; it is a sentence structure/content error. Provide a grammatically appropriate reply in the correct tense: use present perfect 'have/has' for experience. Suggestion: answer the question directly with a full sentence using present perfect tense.

× For example, when I go for work I usually listen to acoustic or mellow sounds because they help me relax and concentrate.

✓ For example, when I go to work I usually listen to acoustic or mellow music because it helps me relax and concentrate.

The phrase 'go for work' is incorrect; use 'go to work'. Also 'sounds' is less natural than 'music' in this context, and 'they help me relax' treats 'music' as plural; 'music' is uncountable, so use singular verb 'helps'. Suggestion: replace 'for' with 'to', use 'music', and ensure verb agrees with uncountable noun.