Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, correct grammar, and stay on topic (sad vs happy). Start with a clear topic sentence, give one brief reason with a linking word, and avoid repetition. Use correct verbs and vocabulary (e.g., "feel better", "metal or indie").

예시: I don't usually choose music by mood; I prefer metal or indie music because they match my vibe and make me feel better. For example, listening to indie helps me relax, while metal energizes me.

제안: Answer directly and expand with a clear contrast using linking words. Correct plural usage and word choice ("sad music" not "sad musics"). Provide a specific situation to support your statement.

예시: Sometimes happy music makes me feel more excited, especially when I'm exercising. However, other times I prefer sad music when I want to reflect or concentrate.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence stating your experience, then add one specific detail about your role and what you learned. Use correct vocabulary for instruments/parts and avoid unclear words like "besides".

예시: Yes, I played in my secondary school's band as a bassist for three years. Playing in the band improved my rhythm and teamwork skills.

제안: Be specific about what types of music you listen to and why. Use linking words to connect reasons and correct phrasing ("For example"; "it makes me more confident"). Keep it to two or three concise sentences.

예시: Yes, I often listen to instrumental or lo-fi music while studying because it helps me concentrate. For example, when I prepare for exams, background music reduces my stress and makes me feel more confident.

× I don't prefer either of them, I prefer metal or indie music because I think it's matches my vibe and I became happy.

✓ I don't prefer either of them; I prefer metal or indie music because I think it matches my vibe and makes me happy.

Pronoun 'it' refers to 'metal or indie music' (singular idea), so use singular verb 'matches' (subject-verb agreement). 'I became happy' is incorrect in this context; use 'makes me happy' to express a general effect in the present. Also use a semicolon or period to separate independent clauses for clarity.

× I became more good when I'm listening to middle or indie music so that's why I prefer middle and.

✓ I feel better when I listen to metal or indie music, so that's why I prefer metal and indie.

'More good' is nonstandard; use 'better'. Tense and form: 'when I'm listening' (present continuous) should be 'when I listen' for habitual action. 'Middle' is incorrect; context suggests 'metal'. The sentence ended incomplete; provide full phrase 'metal and indie'.

× Sometimes it makes me feel more excited, but sometimes I want to listen more sad musics.

✓ Sometimes it makes me feel more excited, but sometimes I want to listen to sadder music.

'More sad musics' is wrong: 'music' is an uncountable noun so no plural 'musics' (Grammar problem type 1 applies but list prefers quantifiers here). Use comparative adjective 'sadder' rather than 'more sad', and include preposition 'to' with 'listen to'. Also keep 'music' singular/uncountable.

× I was in a school band in secondary school. My role was besides and it was a good hobby to get skills.

✓ I was in the school band in secondary school. My role was on the side, and it was a good hobby for gaining skills.

'Besides' is incorrect as a noun; likely intended 'on the side' or 'beside' in a different structure. Use 'the school band' for a specific band (definite article). 'To get skills' is awkward; use 'for gaining skills' or 'to develop skills'. Maintain past tense consistently.

× Yes I do, for an example when I have to study for an exam, I mostly like to listen to any music when I'm studying my field, it makes me more. Confidence.

✓ Yes I do; for example, when I have to study for an exam, I usually like to listen to music related to my field because it gives me more confidence.

'For an example' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'for example'. 'Mostly like' is awkward here; 'usually like' is better. 'Listen to any music when I'm studying my field' is unclear; specify 'music related to my field' if intended. Split sentence correctly and fix 'it makes me more. Confidence' to 'it gives me more confidence'. Also use semicolon or period to separate clauses.