Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần sửa ngữ pháp, rõ ràng ý chính và tránh từ sai hoặc không phù hợp (ví dụ “sex music” sai nghĩa). Trả lời nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng, giải thích lý do cụ thể và ngắn gọn (không quá 5 câu). Sử dụng liên từ để nối ý (because, so, when). Ví dụ: nêu rõ thời điểm (at night) và lí do (giúp thư giãn, tập trung).

예시: I prefer sad music, especially at night, because it helps me relax and think more clearly. When I exercise in the evening, calm sad songs help me focus on my breathing and movements. So I often choose slow, emotional tracks to unwind before bed.

제안: Cần dùng cấu trúc tự nhiên hơn, tránh từ ngữ thừa (ví dụ “Dear totally”) và sửa ngữ pháp (comparative: more happy → happier). Nên trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích bằng một hoặc hai lý do cụ thể, dùng liên từ như because or so. Giữ trong tối đa 5 câu.

예시: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more energetic and cheerful because it has an upbeat tempo and positive lyrics. For example, I often listen to pop tracks when I need a mood boost, and they quickly lift my spirits.

제안: Cần dùng thì đúng (I learned / I have learned) và cấu trúc thời gian phù hợp (when I was six). Nên mở rộng bằng 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể về loại lớp học, thời gian học hoặc kĩ năng đã học để phong phú câu trả lời. Dùng liên từ nếu cần nối thêm ý.

예시: Yes, I started learning music when I was six years old. I took piano lessons for three years, which helped me learn basic music theory and improve my sense of rhythm.

제안: Cần trả lời rõ ràng (Yes/No) rồi mô tả thói quen cụ thể, dùng cấu trúc ngữ pháp đúng (I always listen to music) và tránh lặp từ. Thêm chi tiết về loại nhạc bạn nghe khi làm việc và vì sao (helps focus, relax). Dùng liên từ như when or while để nối các hành động.

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other tasks like homework, washing dishes, or cleaning the house. I usually choose instrumental or mellow pop songs because they help me concentrate and make chores more enjoyable.

× I prefer sad music because at night.

✓ I prefer sad music at night.

The phrase 'because at night' is structurally incomplete; 'because' requires a clause explaining a reason (e.g. 'because I feel lonelier at night'). Removing 'because' makes a concise time expression. Suggestion: use 'at night' for time or provide a full reason clause after 'because'.

× You always have to do exercise, so I choose sex music for to listen at night.

✓ You always have to exercise, so I choose sad music to listen to at night.

Multiple issues: 'have to do exercise' is acceptable but 'have to exercise' is more natural (verb form). 'sex music' is likely a typo for 'sad music'. 'for to listen' is incorrect; the correct structure is 'to listen to'. Place 'at night' at end for time. Suggestion: use 'exercise' as verb, correct 'sad', and use 'choose X to listen to at night'.

× Dear totally happy music make my mental health become more happier and I feel better.

✓ Definitely, happy music makes my mental health better and I feel better.

Several problems: 'Dear' is incorrect; use 'definitely' or 'surely'. Subject-verb agreement: 'happy music make' should be 'happy music makes' (music is singular). 'make my mental health become more happier' is awkward and contains double comparative ('more happier'); use 'better' or 'happier'. Suggestion: use singular verb with music, avoid double comparatives, and simplify phrase to 'makes my mental health better'.

× Umm, I have learn music when I was in the age of 6.

✓ Umm, I learned music when I was six years old.

Tense error: 'have learn' is incorrect; the past simple 'learned' (or 'learnt') is required because a specific past time 'when I was six' is given. Also 'in the age of 6' is unnatural; use 'when I was six' or 'at the age of six'. Suggestion: use past simple for completed past actions with a time expression.

× Always doing homework, washing dishes and or umm clean the house everywhere every time I always listening to music.

✓ I always listen to music when I do homework, wash dishes, or clean the house.

Sentence fragments and verb form errors: 'Always doing homework...' is a fragment; subject 'I' and proper verbs are needed. 'clean' should be parallel 'clean the house' and 'I always listening' should be 'I always listen' (simple present for habitual actions). Remove redundant words like 'everywhere every time'. Suggestion: use subject + simple present verbs in parallel list for habits.