Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use correct verb forms and pronouns. Add one specific reason or short example to support your preference and use a linking word for coherence.

예시: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood. For example, upbeat pop songs with lively rhythms help me feel more energetic and positive when I'm stressed, so I usually play them while I work or exercise.

제안: Fix subject-verb agreement and word choice, and make the explanation more concise. Use a linking phrase to connect the cause and effect, and provide one specific detail about what elements of the music create excitement.

예시: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more excited because of its upbeat rhythms and strong beats. For instance, fast tempo songs with a prominent drum beat raise my energy and make me feel more cheerful.

제안: Use past tense correctly and be concise. Give a clear topic sentence stating you haven't taken formal classes, then briefly mention the one-time experience with correct tense and a reason why you didn't continue.

예시: No, I haven't taken formal music classes. I once tried a practical singing lesson, but I didn't continue because I couldn't commit to regular practice.

제안: Correct grammar and reduce repetition. Begin with a clear statement, then use a linking word to add one specific reason or example about how music affects your concentration and performance.

예시: No, I usually avoid listening to music while working because it distracts me. For example, when I tried studying with songs on, I found it harder to focus and my assignments took longer to finish.

× I prefer happy music because it's make me have a better mood while listening it to it.

✓ I prefer happy music because it makes me feel in a better mood while listening to it.

Errors: 'it's make' uses base verb instead of third-person singular present; should be 'it makes' (third-person singular agreement). 'make me have a better mood' is awkward; use 'make me feel in a better mood' or 'put me in a better mood.' 'listening it to it' has incorrect word order and extra words; correct is 'listening to it.' Suggestion: use third-person singular verb forms with 'it' and use the correct preposition 'to' after 'listen.' Use 'feel' instead of 'have' for mood expressions. Grammar problem type ID:10

× Sad music often make me feel sad and I don't like the feeling of being sad so I would prefer to listen to happy music.

✓ Sad music often makes me feel sad and I don't like that feeling, so I prefer to listen to happy music.

Error: 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'Sad music' (third-person singular). Also 'the feeling of being sad' is wordy; 'that feeling' is clearer. 'I would prefer to listen' can be simplified to 'I prefer to listen' to match general preference. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and use concise phrasing. Grammar problem type ID:10

× I do feel that happy music make you more excited because of it rhythms and beats.

✓ I do feel that happy music makes you more excited because of its rhythms and beats.

Errors: 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with 'happy music' (third-person singular). 'it rhythms' is incorrect possessive; use 'its rhythms.' Suggestion: check subject-verb agreement and possessive pronouns. Grammar problem type ID:10

× Higher beats make your heart go faster so it's make your more cheerful and excited to listen to something and it's make you mood better.

✓ Faster beats make your heart beat faster, so they make you more cheerful and excited to listen to something, and they improve your mood.

Errors: 'Higher beats' is awkward; use 'faster beats.' 'make your heart go faster' is acceptable but 'make your heart beat faster' is clearer. 'it's make your more cheerful' mixes contractions and incorrect verb forms; 'they make you more cheerful' is correct (plural 'beats' -> 'they'). 'it's make you mood better' should be 'they improve your mood' or 'they make your mood better.' Suggestion: ensure number agreement between subject and pronoun/verb and choose appropriate adjectives/adverbs. Grammar problem type ID:13

× I never truly take any music classes.

✓ I have never truly taken any music classes.

Error: 'never truly take' uses base verb instead of present perfect; when describing past experience up to now, use present perfect 'have taken.' Also 'taken' is the past participle form. Suggestion: use present perfect for life experiences ('I have never taken'). Grammar problem type ID:5

× I have once try and a practical for a singing lesson but uh, I didn't get into it so I wouldn't count this as one of my classes, but no I haven't.

✓ I once tried a practical singing lesson, but I didn't get into it, so I wouldn't count it as one of my classes.

Errors: 'have once try' mixes present perfect auxiliary with base verb; should be 'I once tried' or 'I have tried once.' 'a practical for a singing lesson' is awkward; 'a practical singing lesson' or 'a practical class' is clearer. 'I wouldn't count this as one of my classes, but no I haven't' is redundant; simplified version removes contradiction. Suggestion: use correct past tense 'tried' for completed past events and simplify redundant phrases. Grammar problem type ID:9

× I don't really listen to music while doing other things because it's distract me from the thing I'm doing.

✓ I don't really listen to music while doing other things because it distracts me from what I'm doing.

Errors: 'it's distract me' is incorrect; use 'it distracts me' (third-person singular). 'the thing I'm doing' is verbose; 'what I'm doing' is more natural. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and use natural relative expressions. Grammar problem type ID:10

× I don't really have a concentration while listen to music and doing other things, so I don't.

✓ I don't really have concentration while listening to music and doing other things, so I don't.

Errors: 'have a concentration' is unnatural; use 'have concentration' or 'can't concentrate.' 'while listen to music' should be 'while listening to music' (gerund after while). Suggestion: use gerund form after 'while' and choose idiomatic expressions like 'can't concentrate.' Grammar problem type ID:8

× It's make my work come out bad.

✓ It makes my work come out poorly.

Errors: 'It's make' incorrect verb form; use 'it makes' (third-person singular). 'come out bad' should use adverb 'poorly' rather than adjective 'bad' to modify the verb 'come out.' Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and use adverbs to modify verbs. Grammar problem type ID:10