Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản (thì, giới từ), phát âm một vài từ và câu trúc câu cho tự nhiên hơn. Trả lời nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nêu 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể liên quan tới trải nghiệm cá nhân. Tránh từ đệm dài (umm) và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc: ví dụ dùng "when" hoặc "because". Hãy sửa lỗi: "while I listening" → "when I'm listening"; "I can understand emotionally and comprehend" nên nói rõ hơn như "help me process my feelings."

예시: I usually choose music based on my mood. For example, when I'm feeling upset after a bad day, I prefer sad songs because they help me process my emotions and feel understood. On the other hand, I listen to happy music when I want to lift my spirits.

제안: Cần sửa cấu trúc câu để rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ, đồng thời dùng từ vựng chính xác (exciting, energetic, boost my energy). Trả lời nên có câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó nêu lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ. Tránh cấu trúc mơ hồ như "happy music is a song that it contains."

예시: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more energetic. It usually has an upbeat tempo and catchy melody that lift my mood and make me want to move. For example, I often play lively pop songs when I'm getting ready in the morning to boost my energy.

제안: Cần rõ ràng về thời điểm và những gì bạn học được; sửa ngữ pháp (present/past, động từ khuyết thiếu) và loại bỏ lỗi lặp. Nên nói một câu chủ đề: "Yes, I took piano lessons." rồi bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể về khoá học và lý do bạn gặp khó khăn (ví dụ: đọc nhạc, kỹ thuật tay).

예시: Yes, I took piano lessons for about a year. In those classes I learned basic piano techniques and how to read rhythm and notes, but I struggled with sight-reading and complex fingerings, so I eventually stopped attending regular lessons.

제안: Cần sửa ngữ pháp (progressive forms), dùng từ vựng phù hợp (cleaning, doing the dishes), và làm câu mạch lạc: nêu hoạt động chính rồi giải thích lý do với từ nối như "because" hoặc "so". Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về loại nhạc bạn nghe sẽ giúp câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other tasks. For example, I listen to upbeat pop or electronic music when I'm doing homework or cleaning the bathroom and washing dishes because it makes these boring chores feel more enjoyable and keeps me motivated.

× Actually it depends on my emotion while I listening to the music.

✓ Actually it depends on my emotion while I am listening to the music.

The verb 'listen' requires the present continuous form 'am listening' after 'while' to show an action in progress. Use 'I am listening' (subject + auxiliary 'am' + present participle) for correct grammar.

× Umm for me for example, if I'm having something bad or terrible, I would prefer to listen to sad music so that I can understand emotionally and comprehend.

✓ For example, if I am going through something bad, I prefer to listen to sad music because it helps me process my emotions.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and redundancy ('understand emotionally and comprehend' mean the same). Use 'going through something bad' and 'helps me process my emotions' for clarity and natural structure. Also match conditional preference with present simple 'I prefer' rather than 'would prefer' for general tendency.

× Definitely happy music is the my best option when I'm choosing a song to hear because it is excited and also boost my energy up because for me happy music is a song that it contains.

✓ Definitely, happy music is my best option when I choose a song to listen to because it makes me feel excited and boosts my energy.

Remove extra article 'the' before 'my best option'. Use 'choose' (present simple) for a habitual action. Adjectives like 'excited' need a verb 'makes me feel excited'. Use 'boosts' to agree with singular 'music'. The clause 'song that it contains' is ungrammatical and unnecessary; instead express the intended effect directly.

× Yes I have. I have taken a piano class which can learn about piano and also the rhythm, but I fail to catch up with them because it is too hard and I am I cannot understand all of the words of music.

✓ Yes, I have. I took a piano class where I learned about the piano and rhythm, but I couldn't keep up because it was too hard and I couldn't understand all the musical terms.

Use past simple 'took' and 'learned' for completed actions. 'Which can learn about' is incorrect; use 'where I learned'. 'Fail to catch up' should be past 'couldn't keep up' to match past context. 'Words of music' is unclear; 'musical terms' is more idiomatic.

× Yes I do, I usually listen to music while I doing my homework or having a clean to my bathroom or dishwash because I can feel more exciting and also the uplifting when doing those boring things.

✓ Yes, I do. I usually listen to music while I am doing my homework or cleaning the bathroom or washing the dishes because it makes me feel more excited and uplifted when doing those boring tasks.

Use present continuous 'I am doing' after 'while'. 'Having a clean to my bathroom' is incorrect; use 'cleaning the bathroom'. 'Dishwash' should be 'washing the dishes'. Use 'makes me feel more excited and uplifted' to form correct verb phrases and adjectives.