Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give one specific reason using linking words. For example, say you prefer happy music because it boosts your energy and helps you focus. Keep it to 1–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer happy music. Because upbeat songs boost my energy and help me concentrate when I’m doing tasks, I usually choose them over sad tunes.

제안: Organize your reply with a clear topic sentence then give a specific contrast using linking words. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement and plural forms) and avoid vague phrases. Mention one example and its effect. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, it does. I’m quite emotional, so music strongly affects my mood; for example, my uncle’s sad songs sometimes bring me to tears, whereas upbeat tracks lift my spirits and increase my energy.

제안: Give a direct, grammatical response and combine reasons using linking words. Avoid fillers and unclear words. Be specific about the cost and short duration and say what you do instead. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Not yet. Music classes are quite expensive and the lessons are very short (about 30 minutes), so instead I practice by myself at home using online tutorials.

제안: Answer directly and correct small grammar issues (articles, verb forms). Use a linking word to explain why and give one specific situation. Keep it concise and natural (1–2 sentences).

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while walking. I usually choose upbeat songs because they boost my energy and make me feel more motivated to work.

× It's because with upbeat, upbeat music, my energy will be up.

✓ It's because upbeat music lifts my energy.

Redundant wording and incorrect verb phrase: 'will be up' is an awkward future construction when describing habitual reaction. Using present simple 'lifts' fits general fact. Also remove repeated 'upbeat' for clarity.

× I am quite emotional so music strongly affect my mood.

✓ I am quite emotional so music strongly affects my mood.

Subject-verb agreement in present simple requires third person singular 'affects' because the subject 'music' is singular. Use present simple to state a general truth.

× My uncle's song make me feel down and sometimes bring me to tears, whereas upbeat energetic track lift my spirit and give me more energy.

✓ My uncle's songs make me feel down and sometimes bring me to tears, whereas upbeat energetic tracks lift my spirits and give me more energy.

Plural consistency: 'songs' and 'tracks' should be plural to match verbs 'make', 'bring', 'lift', 'give'. Also 'spirit' as count noun here should be plural 'spirits' when referring to mood. Maintain parallel structure and subject-verb agreement.

× Music classes for me is very expensive.

✓ Music classes for me are very expensive.

Plural subject 'Music classes' requires the verb 'are' (third person plural). Use 'are' for correct subject-verb agreement.

× And then you know the duration of the class also very short, only uh, 30 minutes in the class.

✓ Also, the duration of the classes is very short, only about 30 minutes.

Sentence needs proper connector and verb. Remove filler 'you know' and repetition 'in the class'. Use 'is' for singular noun 'duration' and pluralize 'classes' or keep singular with 'the class duration is'. Use 'about' for approximation.

× So I rever, uh, practice by myself.

✓ So I prefer to practice by myself.

Likely intended word is 'prefer', not 'rever'. Use infinitive 'to practice' after 'prefer' when stating a general preference. Remove hesitation filler for clarity.

× Yes I do uh, I listen to the music while I walking so I always choose upbeat music because it will affect my energy so I will be excited to work.

✓ Yes I do. I listen to music while I am walking, so I always choose upbeat music because it affects my energy and makes me excited to work.

Use continuous 'am walking' for actions in progress. Remove unnecessary article 'the' before 'music'. Use present simple 'affects' for general effect and 'makes me excited' for result. Also split into two sentences or use proper commas for clarity.