Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, correct grammar, and use a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting reasons. Avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood after a long day. For example, upbeat songs with energetic rhythms make me feel more refreshed and motivated to finish my homework.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence and give specific reasons and a brief example. Correct verb forms and use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Yes, it does. Happy music often has fast tempos and bright melodies, so it energizes me. For instance, listening to an upbeat pop song before studying makes me feel more focused and positive.

제안: Give a clear direct answer, then provide specific reasons and one detail about future plans. Fix grammar (negative forms, verb forms) and keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, I haven't taken any music classes because singing and playing instruments are not my strengths, and I have a busy schedule. However, I would like to start piano lessons in the future if I can find the time.

제안: Answer directly, correct pronoun/tense errors, and give specific examples of activities and music types. Use linking words to make the sentence flow and avoid unfinished thoughts.

예시: Yes, I usually listen to music while doing homework or household chores. I mostly play pop music because it helps me concentrate, although sometimes I choose slower, sad songs when I need to relax.

× I prefer happy music because it can help me feels more excited and happy and I can it can help me really change after a busy day at school.

✓ I prefer happy music because it can help me feel more excited and happy and it can really help me change after a busy day at school.

The verb 'help' should be followed by the base form 'feel' not the third-person singular 'feels' (rule: verb + base form after 'help'). Also the sentence contained a duplicated phrase 'I can it can'; replace with a single subject 'it' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'help me feel' and remove duplicate words to improve fluency.

× Happy music can make me feel more excited because it is very energetic and cheerful. It usually tell our love story or happy story so I can feel more ecstatic and relax.

✓ Happy music can make me feel more excited because it is very energetic and cheerful. It usually tells our love stories or happy stories so I can feel more ecstatic and relaxed.

The verb 'tell' needs third-person singular agreement 'tells' (present simple). 'Our love story' likely should be plural 'love stories' or 'a love story' to match context. 'Relax' should be the past participle 'relaxed' to describe a feeling. Suggestion: use 'tells' and 'relaxed' or rephrase to 'makes me feel relaxed'.

× Uh no I didn't take any music classes because it is not my hobby and I not good at sing a song or plays a any age instrument and but I really want to join a piano class but I don't have any time.

✓ No, I didn't take any music classes because it is not my hobby and I'm not good at singing songs or playing any kind of instrument, but I really want to join a piano class and I don't have time.

Several issues: 'I not good' requires contraction 'I'm not' (pronoun + verb). After 'good at' use gerund forms 'singing' and 'playing' rather than base verbs. 'Plays a any age instrument' is ungrammatical; use 'playing any kind of instrument'. Also 'but I really want...' needs proper coordination; remove extra 'and' before 'but'. Suggestion: use gerunds after 'good at', correct contractions, and simplify phrasing.

× Yes he usually listening to music while I'm doing my homework as to households and if I listening to music I can do it's more better and I usually listening pop music or sometimes I listen to sad music if I.

✓ Yes, I usually listen to music while I'm doing my homework or doing household chores, and if I listen to music I can do my work better. I usually listen to pop music, and sometimes I listen to sad music.

Pronoun 'he' is incorrect if referring to self; change to 'I'. Use base form 'listen' for simple present third-person? actually 'I listen'. Use gerund 'doing household chores' for activities. 'If I listening' should be 'if I listen'. 'It's more better' is incorrect; use 'better'. Remove trailing incomplete clause. Suggestion: use correct pronoun, correct verb forms for present simple, use gerunds for continuous activities, and avoid double comparatives like 'more better'.