Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two brief specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct grammar (e.g., "makes me feel", "while doing my homework").

예시: I prefer happy music because it makes me feel better after a long day. For example, I often play upbeat pop songs while doing my homework, which helps me stay focused. On the other hand, I usually avoid heavy metal because I find it too loud and distracting.

제안: Answer directly and correct grammar and repetition. Give a clear reason and one specific example. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" and avoid vague phrases like "some sad accidents."

예시: Yes, happy music does make me feel more excited because it lifts my mood after a bad day. For example, when I'm upset I play fast-tempo dance tracks because their energetic rhythm cheers me up.

제안: Give a clear, concise response about your experience. Use past simple or present perfect correctly and provide one specific detail about what you learned. Avoid unclear or redundant phrases.

예시: Yes, I took piano lessons for two years when I was younger. For instance, I learned basic music theory and how to read sheet music, although I don't take lessons anymore.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and one or two clear supporting details. Use correct collocations (e.g., "while doing tasks/homework") and avoid repeated words. Specify the types of activities and music and explain why.

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while doing homework or cleaning because it helps me relax and concentrate. For example, I usually play upbeat but not too loud pop or electronic tracks when I study to keep my energy up.

× I prefer happy music because it has me to feel better after school.

✓ I prefer happy music because it helps me feel better after school.

The phrase 'has me to feel' is incorrect; use 'help' with an object + bare infinitive: 'helps me feel'. Also 'helps' agrees with singular 'it' (third person). Use 'feel better' not 'to feel better' after 'help' in informal contexts for natural phrasing.

× For instance, I listen to some lovely beats while do while having my homework.

✓ For instance, I listen to some lovely beats while doing my homework.

After 'while' use the -ing form 'doing' to show an action in progress. Remove the extra 'do' and redundant words; 'listen to some lovely beats' is correct.

× However, I can't stand some heavy metal, it's too noisy for me.

✓ However, I can't stand heavy metal; it's too noisy for me.

Combine clauses properly: use a semicolon or separate into two sentences instead of a comma splice. Also 'some heavy metal' is unnatural; 'heavy metal' without 'some' is better.

× Yes, I it makes me feel more excited because it helps me to feel more better after some sad sad accidents.

✓ Yes, it makes me feel more excited because it helps me feel better after some sad incidents.

Remove the stray 'I'. Use 'makes' for third person singular 'it'. After 'help' use bare infinitive 'feel' not 'to feel'. 'More better' is incorrect — use 'better'. 'Sad accidents' is awkward; 'sad incidents' or 'sad experiences' is clearer. Remove duplicated 'sad'.

× For instance, I would like to prefer some high beats music, however I can't stand some.

✓ For instance, I prefer music with a fast beat; however, I can't stand some types of it.

'Would like to prefer' is redundant and ungrammatical — use 'prefer'. 'High beats music' is wrong; use 'music with a fast beat' or 'fast-beat music'. Clarify 'some' to 'some types of it'. Use proper clause separation ('; however,' or separate sentences).

× Yes I have taken some music class because it can make me a few more let me feel more music about it.

✓ Yes, I have taken some music classes because they helped me learn more about music.

'Some music class' should be plural 'music classes' or 'a music class'. 'Because it can make me a few more let me feel more music about it' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'they helped me learn more about music' to convey the intended meaning. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'classes... helped' or 'a class... helped'.

× For instance, I I have some filing lessons, however I I am not have this lesson anymore.

✓ For instance, I had some singing lessons; however, I don't take them anymore.

Remove duplicate 'I'. 'Filing lessons' likely means 'singing lessons'. Use past tense 'had' if referring to completed lessons. 'I am not have this lesson anymore' is incorrect — use 'I don't take them anymore' or 'I no longer have these lessons'.

× Yes, I listen to music while I'm doing another tricks because it can make me feel more relaxed to to do anything.

✓ Yes, I listen to music while I'm doing other things because it makes me feel more relaxed when I do anything.

'Another tricks' is incorrect; use 'other things'. Remove the duplicated 'to'. Use 'makes' to agree with 'it' (music) and keep parallel structure: 'feel more relaxed when I do things' or simply 'relaxed while doing things'.

× For example, I listen to I listen some quite fast music to while I'm doing my homework.

✓ For example, I listen to some fairly fast music while I'm doing my homework.

Remove duplicate 'I listen'. Use 'listen to some fairly fast music' ('fairly' or 'quite' as an adverb before 'fast'). Place 'while' correctly before the clause 'I'm doing my homework'.