Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, correct grammar, and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Correct verb forms and singular/plural agreement are important.

예시: I usually prefer happy music because it reduces stress and improves my mood. For example, upbeat songs with lively rhythms help me feel more energetic and motivated when I’m working or exercising.

제안: Answer directly, use correct sentence structure and linking words, and avoid unclear fragments. Give one clear reason and a specific example. Watch word choice (e.g. 'uplift the mood', 'feel excited') and remove incomplete sentences.

예시: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited because upbeat tempos and bright melodies lift my mood. For instance, when I hear an energetic pop song, I feel more motivated to go for a run or try something new.

× Usually I prefer happy music because it reduce our stress and uplift our mood to happy and also relieve our stress.

✓ Usually I prefer happy music because it reduces our stress, uplifts our mood, and relieves our stress.

The subject 'it' refers to 'happy music' (singular), so verbs must take the third person singular form (adds -s). Also coordinate verbs need consistent forms and commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'reduces', 'uplifts', 'relieves' and combine items with commas and 'and' to make the sentence natural.

× Yes definitely happy music feels more excited as compared to sad songs because happy music uplift our moment and feel relaxed and peaceful, reduce our stress and also it.

✓ Yes, definitely; happy music makes me feel more excited compared to sad songs because it uplifts my mood, helps me feel relaxed and peaceful, and reduces my stress.

Several issues: 'feels more excited' is incorrect because music does not feel; a person feels, so use 'makes me feel'. 'As compared to' is wordy; use 'compared to'. 'Uplift our moment' is wrong collocation and tense; use 'uplifts my mood'. Verb forms need third person singular ('uplifts', 'reduces'). Place adverbs and commas correctly. Suggestion: refer feelings to the listener (me) and use consistent verb forms.

× Fresh. Ever moved to enjoy many new things?

✓ It also makes me feel refreshed and more willing to try new things.

The original fragments 'Fresh.' and 'Ever moved to enjoy many new things?' are incomplete and unclear. Combine ideas into a full sentence that expresses cause and effect: music makes the listener feel refreshed and motivates trying new things. Use complete clauses and proper verbs ('makes me feel refreshed', 'willing to try').