Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy and natural phrasing, be concise, and add one specific reason or example. Use singular 'music' and correct verb forms. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two supporting details connected with linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so').

예시: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and motivates me to concentrate. For example, when I study or exercise I listen to upbeat songs because their steady rhythm keeps me energetic and helps me focus.

제안: Correct vocabulary and sentence structure, use linking words to connect ideas, and provide a clear, specific explanation or example. Use 'melodies' or 'the melody', 'faster' instead of 'quickly' (use adjective), and avoid repetition. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, it does. Happy music usually has faster tempos and louder dynamics, so it makes me feel more energetic; for instance, upbeat pop songs help me feel pumped when I go for a run.

× So I prefer happy musics because I believe that happiness can motivate someone to do better and try our breath our best.

✓ So I prefer happy music because I believe that happiness can motivate someone to do better and try our best.

Use of 'musics' is incorrect; 'music' is an uncountable noun and does not take a plural form in this sense (Grammar Problem Type 1). Also 'our breath our best' is ungrammatical and likely intended to be 'our best' or 'their best'; here 'our best' fits the speaker context. Suggestion: treat 'music' as uncountable and say 'happy music'; simplify phrase to 'try our best.'

× So I think the happy music's is good for me to do something.

✓ So I think happy music is good for me for doing things.

The original has an incorrect use of the definite article and a possessive apostrophe ('music's') that makes no sense (Grammar Problem Type 17). 'The happy music's' should be 'happy music' (no article) or 'the happy music' if referring to specific music. Also 'to do something' is vague; 'for doing things' or 'for helping me do things' is clearer. Suggestion: remove the apostrophe and unnecessary article and use a gerund phrase 'for doing things' or 'for helping me do things.'

× I think yes, because happy musics normally the melody is quite quickly or is quite louder, so I think it can make our make me feel more excited, also can push my.

✓ I think so, because happy music normally has a quite quick melody or is quite loud, so I think it can make me feel more excited and even motivate me.

Multiple issues: 'musics' should be 'music' (uncountable) (Grammar Problem Type 1). 'the melody is quite quickly' mixes adjective/adverb forms; 'melody is quite quick' or better 'has a quite quick melody' (Grammar Problem Type 13). 'is quite louder' is ungrammatical; use 'is quite loud' or 'louder than...' (Grammar Problem Type 13/25). 'our make me' is incorrect pronoun and redundancy; use 'me' (Grammar Problem Type 12). Final fragment 'also can push my' is incomplete; likely 'push me' or 'push my mood'—here 'motivate me' works. Suggestions: use 'music' (uncountable), 'has a quick melody' or 'is loud', use correct pronoun 'me', and complete verbs ('motivate me').