Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 答题要注意语法完整和句子连贯。你可以把主题句与支持细节分开，使用连词或从句使表达更自然，例如用because连接原因，并修正动词时态与冠词（e.g. "happy music is always lively"）。另外可以加入一两个具体例子或场景，使内容更具体，但不要超过5句。

예시: I prefer happy music because it is lively and energetic. After long periods of stressful study, I usually play upbeat pop songs to relax and lift my mood. For example, listening to a cheerful playlist helps me focus less on stress and feel more positive.

제안: 回答要避免重复词汇和片段式句子，注意连贯性与准确的搭配，例如用完整句子表达肯定（"Yes, it does."），并用连接词（therefore, so, when）组织细节。可以给出一两个具体例子说明怎样改变情绪，但保持句子简洁且不超过5句。

예시: Yes, it does. Happy music often has uplifting melodies and brisk rhythms, so it makes me feel more cheerful and energetic. For instance, when I'm feeling down I put on an upbeat song and within a few minutes my mood usually improves.

× I prefer happy music because happy music always lively and energetic.

✓ I prefer happy music because happy music is always lively and energetic.

句子缺少系动词“is”。在描述主语的状态或性质时，需要使用系动词连接主语和表语。建议养成在主语后检查是否需要“is/are/was”等系动词来完成句子。

× After a long period of stressful study, I would like to listen to happy music to relax myself.

✓ After a long period of stressful study, I like to listen to happy music to relax myself.

原句使用“would like”会给人一种条件或礼貌请求的意味，而这里是在陈述习惯性行为，应使用一般现在时“like”。简化建议：表达习惯或经常做的事用一般现在时（I like to... / I usually...）。

× Yes, definitely happy music, always energetic and lively.

✓ Yes, definitely — happy music is always energetic and lively.

原句是片段，缺少谓语和连词，且需要系动词使结构完整。使用破折号或连词并加上“is”可形成完整句子。建议写完整句子，避免句子碎片。

× It contains uplifting melody which makes me feel more cheerful.

✓ It contains uplifting melodies which make me feel more cheerful.

名词单复数搭配不当。“melody”在此处应为可数复数“melodies”或在单数前加不定冠词“an uplifting melody”。同时，关系从句的动词要与先行词复数一致，故用“make”。建议确认先行词的单复数并使动词一致。

× When I am sad, I always listen to happy music and after that the terrible things are out of my mind.

✓ When I am sad, I always listen to happy music, and after that the terrible things are out of my mind.

此句主要问题是标点和连词衔接，原句已用一般现在时表达习惯性动作，但在“and”前应加逗号来连接两个并列分句，保证句子流畅。另一点：语义上“the terrible things are out of my mind”可以接受，但更自然的表达是“the terrible things go out of my mind”或“they leave my mind”。建议使用逗号连接并考虑用更自然的动词如“leave/go out of”。