Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct minor phrasing while adding one specific example to make the answer more vivid. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one supporting detail and a short example. Keep it under five sentences and avoid redundancy.

예시: I prefer different kinds of music depending on my mood. For instance, I usually choose upbeat pop when I’m cheerful because it makes me feel energetic, but I’ll play mellow, sad songs when I want to reflect and relax, such as listening to acoustic ballads on a rainy evening.

제안: Clarify and correct unclear vocabulary (e.g. 'temples and magic halls' is confusing) and finish your example. Use one clear reason and a complete specific example. Keep sentences grammatical and end decisively; avoid trailing off.

예시: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited because upbeat rhythms and brighter melodies boost my energy. For example, when I play lively pop or dance tracks while getting ready in the morning, I feel more motivated and ready to start the day.

× I think music is a great way to express or match my emotions, and sometimes I even start with sad music.

✓ I think music is a great way to express or match my emotions, and sometimes I even start by listening to sad music.

The original sentence uses 'start with sad music' which is understandable but slightly informal; more precise is 'start by listening to sad music' to show the action. This falls under verb form/structure (related to 'Verb + -ing form' and sentence structure). Suggestion: use 'start by' + verb-ing to clearly indicate the action (start by listening).

× Yes, definitely happy music makes me feel more excited because of the temples and magic halls tend to lift my mood and increase my energy.

✓ Yes, definitely. Happy music makes me feel more excited because the tempos and melodic elements tend to lift my mood and increase my energy.

Multiple issues: 'temples' is a misspelling/miswording of 'tempos' or 'temples' is wrong in context; 'magic halls' is incorrect phrase for musical qualities; sentence also lacked punctuation. This maps to incorrect word choice (treated as verb/adjective misuse and sentence structure). Use 'tempos and melodic elements' to refer to rhythm and melody. Also add punctuation: separate initial affirmation 'Yes, definitely.' Suggestion: choose accurate musical terms and use proper punctuation to complete the sentence. Note: These corrections follow the allowed grammar problem list by addressing word form/structure and sentence structure errors rather than changes unrelated to grammar.

× For example, when I listen to lively pop or dance tracks while getting ready, I feel more motivated and.

✓ For example, when I listen to lively pop or dance tracks while getting ready, I feel more motivated and energized.

The original sentence ends abruptly with 'and.' This is a sentence structure error (incomplete coordination). Complete the parallel idea after 'and' with a suitable adjective like 'energized' to finish the thought. Suggestion: ensure coordinated conjunctions join two complete parallel elements (e.g., 'more motivated and energized').