Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a clear direct answer first, then add one or two specific supporting details. Aim for grammatical correctness and logical linking. Reduce hesitation words (um, so) and avoid repetition. Use linking words like "when" or "because" to connect ideas and be specific about situations and types of music.

예시: I usually prefer happy music, but it depends on my mood. For example, when I’m getting ready in the morning or having breakfast I like upbeat pop songs because they make me feel energetic and ready for the day.

제안: Respond directly with a full sentence and avoid listing conflicting feelings without explanation. Use linking words to explain why and give specific examples. Correct subject-verb agreement and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., "makes me feel").

예시: Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited and cheerful because of its fast tempo and lively melody. For instance, I listen to upbeat electronic or pop songs when I shower or have breakfast to boost my energy for the day.

× It depends on my mood so but I often listen type music in different ways.

✓ It depends on my mood, but I often listen to different types of music.

The sentence has multiple structure issues: unnecessary fillers ('so but'), missing preposition 'to' after 'listen', and incorrect noun phrase 'type music' which should be 'types of music'. Combine clauses with a single conjunction 'but' and place commas to improve clarity. Suggestion: remove redundant words, use 'listen to', and say 'different types of music'.

× For example if I get a shower or had a have a breakfast.

✓ For example, if I take a shower or have breakfast.

This fragment has tense and word-choice errors: 'get a shower' is unnatural — use 'take a shower'; 'had a have a breakfast' is ungrammatical repetition. Use present simple 'take'/'have' to match habitual context. Add a comma after 'For example' and make the clause complete.

× Maybe so, but it depends on my mood.

✓ Maybe, but it depends on my mood.

The phrase 'Maybe so' is awkward here. Use 'Maybe' alone as a filler. Keep the conjunction 'but' and the main clause. Remove the extra word for natural spoken English.

× Yes, happy music feel me more excited, more cheerful, relaxed, reflective, umm.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited, more cheerful, relaxed, and reflective.

Subject-verb agreement: 'music' is treated as singular, so use 'makes' (third person singular). The verb pattern is 'make someone feel', not 'feel me'. Also add 'and' before the last adjective and remove filler 'umm'. Suggest practicing the collocation 'make me feel'.

× So I always listen, umm, so fast music, uh, in when I'm showering or having breakfast.

✓ So I always listen to fast music when I'm showering or having breakfast.

Use the preposition 'to' after 'listen'. Remove redundant fillers 'so' and 'uh'. Use 'when I'm showering' and 'having breakfast' correctly; both clauses with -ing are fine here. Also 'fast music' is correct word order. Suggest speaking without unnecessary fillers and include 'to' after 'listen'.