Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сформулируйте ответ более прямо и логично: начните с ясного утверждения, затем добавьте короткое объяснение и пример. Избегайте слов-паразитов («umm», «uh») и грамматических ошибок (например, «in generation umm genre»). Используйте правильные формы глаголов и более подходящие слова (например, «genre», «makes me feel»). Держите ответ в пределах 1–3 предложений и используйте связку для логики (например, «because»).

예시: I don't prefer only sad or only happy music; I enjoy many genres because different songs suit different moods. For example, I like upbeat pop when I need energy and soft acoustic when I want to relax.

제안: Отвечайте прямо, используя грамматически корректные структуры времени и подходящую лексику. Начните с ясного утверждения, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных последствий (что вы делаете и почему). Избегайте повторов («happy music make me feel happy») и слов-паразитов. Используйте связки (например, «because», «so», «for example») и корректные формы (например, «makes me feel excited», «I often start dancing or laughing»).

예시: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more excited because its fast rhythm and cheerful lyrics lift my mood. For example, when I hear an upbeat song I often start dancing and smiling, and I feel more energetic.

× No, I don't prefer sad or happy music and in generation umm genre of music, I love all music.

✓ No, I don't prefer sad or happy music, and in general, I love all genres of music.

The original sentence uses incorrect words 'generation' and 'genre' together and awkward pronoun reference. Replace 'in generation umm genre of music' with 'in general' and 'I love all genres of music' to express the intended meaning. Also add a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses. Suggestions: use 'in general' for general statements and 'genres' as the plural of 'genre' when referring to multiple types of music.

× Uh it make me uh happy in another.

✓ It makes me happy in different ways.

The subject 'it' is third person singular and requires the verb 'make' to be 'makes' (subject-verb agreement). The phrase 'in another' is unclear; 'in different ways' conveys varied effects. Suggestion: ensure the verb agrees with the subject and choose appropriate phrase to express meaning.

× In my opinion, I happy music made me feel exceeded very much.

✓ In my opinion, happy music makes me feel very excited.

The original mixes past tense 'made' with present opinion 'In my opinion' and uses incorrect adjective 'exceeded' instead of 'excited'. Use present simple 'makes' to express general truth and 'excited' as the correct adjective. Also move 'very' before 'excited' for natural word order.

× It's real because happy music make me feel happy.

✓ It's true because happy music makes me feel happy.

Use 'true' instead of 'real' in this context. Also 'happy music' is third person singular and requires 'makes' not 'make' (subject-verb agreement). Ensure verb agrees with subject.

× I umm, will start to dance, uh, laughing and dull.

✓ I will start to dance, laugh, and feel cheerful.

The original mixes verb forms and includes 'dull', which conflicts with the intended meaning. Use parallel verb forms: 'dance' and 'laugh', and replace 'dull' with 'feel cheerful' or 'feel joyful'. Also place 'will' before the verbs in future tense and keep verbs in base form for parallel structure.