Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using appropriate linking words. Avoid awkward phrases (e.g. “the scenery is describing”) and grammar errors (article use, word order). Also limit to under five sentences.

예시: I prefer sad music. I find that its lyrics and melodies tend to be more expressive, especially when they describe heartbreak or difficult relationships. For example, melancholic songs often use vivid imagery and slower tempos that help me connect emotionally.

제안: Give a complete, fluent response. Begin with a clear answer then explain with a specific example and use linking words (e.g., “so,” “for example”). Fix grammar (verb tense, countable nouns, word endings) and finish your sentence. Keep it to a few sentences.

예시: Yes, definitely — happy music cheers me up. When I feel upset or uninspired, I open a playlist of upbeat songs on my music app, and the lively rhythms and positive lyrics quickly lift my mood. For example, after a long day I often play cheerful pop tracks to feel more energetic.

× Well, I prefer the sad music personally because the lyrics and the tunes of the music are always better when the scenery is describing the heartbreaking or a bad relationship.

✓ Well, I personally prefer sad music because the lyrics and tunes are always better when the song describes a heartbreaking or bad relationship.

Errors: unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'sad music' and 'lyrics and the tunes of the music'; awkward phrasing 'when the scenery is describing' and incorrect noun choice 'scenery'. Corrections: remove unnecessary articles, simplify 'the lyrics and tunes', replace 'the scenery is describing' with 'the song describes', and use 'a heartbreaking or bad relationship'. Suggestion: use concise noun phrases and match articles to countability (music is uncountable here), and use active verbs for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× Yes, definitely. Every time when I felt upset and uninspired, I just turned to my playlist on my music app.

✓ Yes, definitely. Whenever I feel upset and uninspired, I turn to my playlist on my music app.

Errors: tense mismatch—question asks about habitual reaction, so present simple is required; 'Every time when I felt' mixes past with habitual context. 'Whenever I feel' and 'I turn' express habitual present. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and avoid combining 'every time' with past tense when describing general habits. Grammar problem type ID:6

× So I just play several joyful music and it could definitely raise my.

✓ So I just play several joyful songs and it definitely raises my mood.

Errors: 'several joyful music' is incorrect because 'music' is uncountable; use 'several joyful songs' (countable). 'it could definitely raise my.' is incomplete and vague—missing object; change to 'it definitely raises my mood.' Also change modal 'could' to 'definitely' with present 'raises' to show habitual effect. Suggestion: choose correct noun forms (music vs. song), provide complete object, and match modal/verb to intended certainty. Grammar problem type ID:14