Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix verb forms and word order (e.g., "it helps" not "it's helped").

예시: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood. For example, when I feel sad or heartbroken, upbeat songs with positive lyrics help me feel more energetic and optimistic.

제안: Use one clear sentence to answer, then add a specific reason with linking words. Correct verb forms and remove redundant phrases. Group related ideas and give a short example.

예시: Yes. Happy music makes me feel more excited because it lifts my mood and distracts me from worries. For instance, upbeat rhythms and catchy choruses help me forget problems and feel more positive.

× I prefer happy music because it's helped meet with my mood.

✓ I prefer happy music because it helps me match my mood.

The original uses incorrect verb forms: 'it's helped meet with my mood' mixes present perfect with an incorrect verb phrase. This is a sentence structure and verb form error. Use simple present 'helps' for general preference/habit and the correct object pronoun 'me' and verb 'match' to express aligning mood. Suggestion: use 'it helps me match my mood' for clarity and correct tense.

× Example, if I'm I feel sad broken, I prefer to to listen happy music in order to boost my mood.

✓ For example, if I feel sad or heartbroken, I prefer to listen to happy music to boost my mood.

Errors include redundant words ('I'm I'), wrong adjective order/choice ('sad broken'), repeated 'to', incorrect preposition placement ('listen happy music'), and word order. Correct by using 'For example' to introduce, simple present 'I feel' for habitual condition, 'sad or heartbroken' for adjectives, 'prefer to listen to' (verb + to + object) and use 'to boost my mood' (purpose).

× Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because it's lift up my mood, cheering me up, help me to forget the problems, sad, heartbroken.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because it lifts my mood, cheers me up, and helps me forget problems when I am sad or heartbroken.

Multiple verb agreement and form errors: 'it's lift up' is wrong—use third-person singular 'it lifts'. Use parallel verbs in same form: 'cheers' (not 'cheering' alone) and 'helps' (not 'help'). 'Help me to forget the problems' should be 'helps me forget problems'. Also clarify 'sad, heartbroken' as 'when I am sad or heartbroken' for grammatical correctness and clarity.

× So I really prefer and like and make me feel more excited.

✓ So I really prefer it because it makes me feel more excited.

The original is ungrammatical and redundant ('prefer and like and make me'). Use a clear structure: 'I prefer it because it makes me feel more excited.' This fixes subject-verb agreement ('it makes') and removes unnecessary repetition. Use conjunction 'because' to link reason.