Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific reason with a brief supporting detail. Correct grammar (e.g., "fit your mood" → "suit my mood", "As you add" is unnecessary). Limit to 2–3 sentences, use a linking word like "because" or "so".

예시: I prefer happy music because it suits my mood and lifts my spirits. For example, upbeat songs with lively rhythms help me feel more energetic when I’m studying or exercising.

제안: Fix grammar and word choice, and be concise. Use a clear topic sentence followed by a specific detail. Use linking words such as "because" and correct noun/plural forms and verb agreement ("music" not "musics", "an energetic rhythm", "it makes"). Keep to 2 sentences.

예시: Yes, happy music often makes me feel more excited because it has an energetic rhythm and fast tempo. For instance, when I hear lively pop songs, I feel motivated to move and my mood improves.

× For me, I prefer happy music because it can fit your mood.

✓ For me, I prefer happy music because it can fit my mood.

The student used the pronoun 'your' which refers to the listener, but the sentence is about the student's preference. Use 'my' to match the speaker (first person). Replace 'your' with 'my' to maintain correct pronoun reference and agreement.

× As you add, if you are in the good mood it can make you more happy.

✓ Also, if you are in a good mood, it can make you happier.

Several issues: 'As you add' is incorrect phraseology; use 'Also' or 'In addition'. 'in the good mood' uses an unnecessary definite article; use 'in a good mood'. Comparative form 'more happy' is nonstandard—use 'happier'. Ensure commas for clarity. The sentence should match present tense general statement.

× Yes, of course, happy musics usually have a energetic rhythm, so it's make me more excited when I listen to this kind of music.

✓ Yes, of course, happy music usually has an energetic rhythm, so it makes me more excited when I listen to this kind of music.

Errors: 'musics' is incorrect because 'music' is an uncountable noun and should remain singular. 'a energetic' is wrong because 'a' before a vowel sound should be 'an energetic'. Subject-verb agreement: 'have' should be 'has' to agree with singular uncountable 'music'. 'it's make' should be 'it makes'—use third person singular present. Fix these to produce grammatically correct present-tense sentence.