Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details or examples. Correct grammar (plural/singular, adverbs) and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'sometimes' and 'when' to improve coherence.

예시: It depends on my mood. Sometimes I prefer sad music because it helps me reflect and calm down; other times I choose happy music to boost my energy, for example when I'm getting ready to go out.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, fix grammar and word order, and provide a specific reason or example. Avoid contradictory statements (excited vs. relaxed) by explaining both feelings if relevant and linking them logically.

예시: Yes, it usually does. Happy music often makes me feel excited because of its upbeat tempo and lively rhythms; for instance, I listen to pop or dance tracks before exercising to increase my motivation.

× Well, it totally depends on my mood. Sometime I prefer sad or sometime I prefer happy music.

✓ Well, it totally depends on my mood. Sometimes I prefer sad music, and sometimes I prefer happy music.

The errors are: 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' (adverb of frequency) and the sentence needs coordination and an article for clarity. Use 'Sometimes' to indicate occasional occurrence and add a comma and 'and' to connect the two clauses. Also include the noun 'music' after 'sad' in the first clause for parallel structure (or repeat the full phrase). This keeps present tense and matches the question context.

× Yes, of course, happy music make me more feel and excited because when I listen happy music I feel very comfortable and relaxed.

✓ Yes, of course, happy music makes me feel more excited because when I listen to happy music I feel very comfortable and relaxed.

Multiple issues corrected but all fall under subject-verb agreement, preposition use, and word order: 'happy music make' should be 'happy music makes' (singular noun phrase 'music' requires third-person singular verb), 'make me more feel and excited' is incorrect word order and redundancy — correct is 'makes me feel more excited'. Also add 'to' after 'listen' ('listen to happy music') and remove the extra 'and'. These fixes preserve present tense and improve clarity.