Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện: (1) Tránh lặp từ và tiếng ngập ngừng (uh) để câu tự nhiên hơn; (2) Sử dụng cấu trúc chủ đề rõ ràng: nêu quan điểm ngắn gọn rồi giải thích; (3) Sửa ngữ pháp: dùng đúng thì và giới từ (e.g. “I prefer listening to…”), và dùng tính từ/phrasal verbs phù hợp (e.g. “when I feel regretful” hoặc “when I’m feeling down”); (4) Thêm chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn để làm rõ lý do. Ví dụ cách cải thiện: “I enjoy both sad and happy music, depending on my mood. When I’m in a good mood I choose upbeat songs because they make me feel energetic; when I’m feeling down I listen to sad ballads because they help me process my emotions.”

예시: I enjoy both sad and happy music, depending on my mood. When I’m in a good mood, I usually choose upbeat songs because they make me feel energetic and motivated. But when I’m feeling regretful or down, I prefer listening to sad ballads since they help me reflect and feel understood.

제안: Cải thiện: (1) Trả lời trực tiếp và ngắn gọn ở câu đầu; (2) Dùng liên từ phù hợp để liên kết ý (e.g. “because”, “so”); (3) Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (e.g. “happy music is upbeat and cheerful”, “when I listen to it I feel…”); (4) Tránh mâu thuẫn về cảm xúc (không nên nói ‘excited’ nhưng cuối cùng dùng ‘relaxed’ mà không giải thích). Thêm một ví dụ ngắn để minh họa. Ví dụ cải thiện: “Yes, it does, because upbeat songs boost my energy and make me want to sing along; sometimes they also help me unwind after a long day.”

예시: Yes, it does. Happy music is usually upbeat and cheerful, so it boosts my energy and makes me want to move or sing along. Sometimes it also helps me relax after a stressful day because it lifts my mood quickly.

× I prefer listening, uh, sad, Both sad and happy music uh, but it depends on how I feel that day.

✓ I prefer listening to both sad and happy music, but it depends on how I feel that day.

Use 'prefer' + to-infinitive or 'prefer' + verb-ing with 'to': the correct structure is 'prefer to listen to' or 'prefer listening to'. Here we need 'listening to' and include both genres. Also remove redundant commas and filler words for clarity.

× If I have a good mood, I prefer listening to happy music, but when I am regret about something, I keen on listening uh some.

✓ If I am in a good mood, I prefer listening to happy music, but when I regret something, I am keen on listening to sad music.

'Have a good mood' is not natural; use 'be in a good mood'. 'Am regret' is incorrect: 'regret' is a verb so use 'I regret something'. 'Keen on' requires 'be' before it and 'listening to' needs the preposition 'to' and a clear object (sad music). Also avoid fillers.

× Yes, of course, because I prefer listening happy music when I have a good mood and the happy music have a upbeat cheerful and when I listening it I feel very relaxed and happy.

✓ Yes, of course, because I prefer listening to happy music when I am in a good mood, and the happy music has an upbeat, cheerful sound; when I listen to it I feel very relaxed and happy.

Subject-verb agreement: 'music' is singular, so use 'has' not 'have'. Use 'listening to' or 'listen to' correctly; 'when I listening it' is ungrammatical—use 'when I listen to it'. Add article 'an' before 'upbeat' and a noun 'sound' to complete the phrase.