Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng, dùng câu chủ đề ngắn rồi giải thích. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ không đúng (ví dụ: “both side” → “both” hoặc “both sad and happy music”; “interest music” không chính xác). Dùng liên từ để mạch lạc (e.g., “because”, “so”) và sửa các cấu trúc như “have a happy atmosphere” → “that has a cheerful mood”. Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu, sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp như “cheerful”, “melancholic”, “mood” để diễn đạt chính xác hơn.

예시: I enjoy both sad and happy music depending on my mood. For example, when I feel upbeat, I prefer cheerful songs with an energetic melody. However, if I'm reflective, I might choose melancholic tunes to match my feelings.

제안: Cần trình bày ngắn gọn, tránh lặp từ và tiếng ừ (uh). Sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ: “I love listening happy music” → “I love listening to happy music”; “it helped me to make it help me to feel” → “it helps me feel”). Nên bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể và liên từ để câu mạch lạc (e.g., “because”, “so”), và không vượt quá 3 câu.

예시: Yes, definitely. Happy music usually lifts my spirits and makes me feel more energetic because of its upbeat rhythm and positive lyrics. As a result, I often play cheerful songs when I want to relax or stay motivated.

× I prefer both side or happy music.

✓ I prefer both sad and happy music.

The student used 'both side or happy music' which is ungrammatical and misuses pronouns/phrases. Use 'both' with two items connected by 'and'; also 'side' is incorrect word here. Correction: 'both sad and happy music'. Suggestion: list the two options with 'both ... and ...'.

× It depends on how I feel on that day.

✓ It depends on how I feel that day.

The phrase 'on that day' is unnecessary and sounds awkward in this context. Using 'that day' or 'the day' is more natural. Suggestion: omit 'on' when referring to a general day: 'that day' or simply 'depends how I feel.'

× If I'm happy, I want to listen some interest music that have a happy atmosphere.

✓ If I'm happy, I want to listen to some interesting music that has a happy atmosphere.

Multiple issues: 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' (verb + to + noun), 'some interest music' misuses 'interest' instead of adjective 'interesting', and 'music' is singular uncountable so requires the singular verb 'has'. Suggestion: use 'listen to', adjective 'interesting', and 'has' for agreement: 'interesting music that has.'

× Yes, of course, especially when I'm very happy and I have a good mood on my day.

✓ Yes, of course, especially when I'm very happy and in a good mood that day.

The phrase 'have a good mood on my day' is incorrect. Use 'be in a good mood' rather than 'have a good mood', and 'that day' or 'that day' fits the temporal reference. Suggestion: use 'in a good mood' and place the time expression after: 'in a good mood that day.'

× I love listening happy music because if uh, because it helped me to make it help me to feel more energetic and feel relaxed.

✓ I love listening to happy music because it helps me feel more energetic and relaxed.

Several problems: 'listening happy music' needs 'to' after 'listening', the phrase 'because if uh, because' is redundant and disfluent, and tense/agreement: 'helped me to make it help me to' is wrong. Use present simple 'helps' for general truth and 'feel' without 'to' after 'helps me'. Also combine 'more energetic and relaxed'. Suggestion: simplify to 'I love listening to happy music because it helps me feel more energetic and relaxed.'