Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và mạch câu: cần dùng động từ chia đúng (makes), rút gọn và tránh lặp từ, thêm chi tiết cụ thể về lý do. Nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tiếp theo 1–2 câu hỗ trợ với liên từ phù hợp và không quá dài (tối đa 5 câu).

예시: I prefer happy music because it helps me relax and lift my mood after a long day at school. For example, upbeat pop songs with cheerful melodies usually make it easier for me to unwind and feel more positive.

제안: Làm rõ ý chính và sắp xếp câu logic: trả lời trực tiếp, giải thích nguyên nhân với liên từ (because, so), tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (made → makes, remove extraneous words) và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể, dễ hiểu. Giữ dưới 5 câu và dùng từ vựng phù hợp.

예시: Yes, it usually does because upbeat tunes increase my energy and put me in a better mood after studying. For instance, when I feel stressed, I play fast-paced songs and I quickly feel more cheerful and motivated.

× I prefer happy music because it make me feel relaxed and happy after study at school.

✓ I prefer happy music because it makes me feel relaxed and happy after studying at school.

The verb 'make' should be conjugated 'makes' to agree with the third-person singular subject 'it' (subject-verb agreement). Also, 'after study at school' is ungrammatical; use the gerund 'studying' after the preposition 'after' to indicate the activity. Suggestion: Use 'makes' for third-person singular and 'after studying' to show the action.

× I think yes, because happy music made me feel relaxed and cheerful after studying at school.

✓ I think so, because happy music makes me feel relaxed and cheerful after studying at school.

The speaker expresses a general, habitual reaction to happy music, so present simple 'makes' is appropriate instead of past 'made'. Also 'I think yes' is unnatural; use 'I think so' to agree. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual truths and replace 'I think yes' with 'I think so'.

× For example, sometime I had I feel bad.

✓ For example, sometimes I feel bad.

This sentence has multiple structure errors: 'sometime' should be plural 'sometimes' to indicate occasional occurrences; 'I had I feel' is ungrammatical and redundant. Use the simple present 'I feel' for habitual or repeated feelings. Suggestion: Use 'sometimes' and a single verb phrase 'I feel'.

× I often listen to music about happy music.

✓ I often listen to happy music.

The phrase 'listen to music about happy music' is redundant and ungrammatical. 'Listen to' already takes the music type as object. Use 'listen to happy music' to express the idea clearly. Suggestion: Remove redundancy and state the music type directly.

× Fall.

✓ (remove)

The single word 'Fall.' is a fragment and unrelated; it creates confusion. Either remove it or expand into a full sentence with context (e.g., 'It helps me when I feel down.'). Suggestion: Delete the fragment or provide a complete sentence explaining its meaning.