Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, use correct pronouns and tense, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Aim for up to 3–4 short sentences.

예시: Yes. My favourite teacher was my primary school maths teacher, who taught me for two years. He was humorous and used simple, clear explanations, which made difficult concepts easy to understand. For example, he used everyday objects to demonstrate fractions.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, then one clear reason with a linking word. Fix grammar (no extra words) and finish the thought. Avoid repeating words and provide a specific example of a difficult situation.

예시: No, I do not want to be a teacher. I believe teaching involves a lot of responsibility and handling challenging classroom issues, such as resolving conflicts between students. For instance, managing group work fairly can be stressful.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence and use correct vocabulary (e.g. "my history teacher", not "husband teacher"). Use present or past consistently, and add one specific example to show why you remember them. Use linking words like "also" or "for example".

예시: Yes, I still remember my secondary school history teacher. He was energetic and passionate, and he often used stories and comparisons between events to make lessons memorable. For example, he compared causes of two wars to show how small factors can lead to big outcomes.

제안: Answer directly, explain briefly and clearly why contact was lost, and avoid unfinished sentences. Use past tense correctly and one linking word such as "because" or "so". Provide a concise detail about attempts to reconnect if any.

예시: No, I am not in touch with my primary school teachers. I did not have a mobile phone until I started university, so I lost contact with many of them. I tried to find one teacher on social media, but I could not locate them.

제안: Start with a clear statement of how the teacher helped you, then give a concrete example. Use correct grammar ("my favourite teacher was my maths teacher"), and avoid trailing off. Use a linking word like "so" or "as a result" to show impact.

예시: My favourite teacher was my primary school maths teacher, and he helped me by using a lively teaching style. For example, he used colourful diagrams and real-life problems, so I became more interested in maths and now enjoy solving puzzles.

제안: Give a direct comparison sentence, then support it with one or two specific reasons. Use correct verb forms and avoid repetition. Use linking words such as "because" and "for example" to make your point coherent.

예시: Yes, I prefer my primary school teachers to my high school teachers because they were more patient and encouraging. For example, they explained things gently and showed enthusiasm for the subject, which made learning enjoyable.

× He teached me maths in primary school for about two years.

✓ He taught me math in primary school for about two years.

The verb 'teach' uses the irregular past tense 'taught', not 'teached'. Also 'maths' can be 'math' (US) or 'maths' (UK); consistency preferred. Use past tense because the action occurred in the past.

× I liked her because I liked him because he was humorous and always always taught always teach us in some simple way in some simple ways.

✓ I liked him because he was humorous and always taught us in simple ways.

Pronoun references were inconsistent ('her' then 'him'). Choose 'him' to match earlier 'He'. Remove repeated words and correct verb to past tense 'taught'. Use plural 'ways' or singular 'way' consistently; 'in simple ways' is natural. Reduce redundancy.

× I don't want to be a teacher in the future because I think teachers should be have many responsibilities to students and always and have to deal with many difficult situations among students because most students are are thought

✓ I don't want to be a teacher in the future because I think teachers have many responsibilities to students and often have to deal with difficult situations among students.

Correction removes incorrect combination 'should be have' and uses present simple 'have' to state general truth about teachers' responsibilities. Removed repeated words and unfinished fragment 'because most students are are thought' which is unclear; rephrased to convey intended meaning. Use 'often' instead of repeated 'always' for variety and accuracy.

× Yes, I remember my husband teacher in my secondary school because he is energetic and he is so passionate about his historic lesson.

✓ Yes, I remember my history teacher in secondary school because he was energetic and very passionate about his history lessons.

'Husband teacher' is incorrect—likely 'history teacher'. Match tense: if referring to past schooling, use past tense 'was'. 'Historic lesson' is incorrect collocation; use 'history lesson' or 'history lessons'. Use 'very' instead of 'so' for formality.

× He always tell some histories or examples to us and compare compared different events in the history

✓ He always told us stories or examples and compared different events in history.

Use past tense for past events: 'told' not 'tell'. 'Histories' is awkward—use 'stories' or 'historical events'. Remove redundant 'compare compared' and use past 'compared'. Omit 'the' before 'history' when speaking generally.

× No, I am not in touch with any of my primary school teachers because I have had no mobile phones until I reach uni until I reach university.

✓ No, I am not in touch with any of my primary school teachers because I did not have a mobile phone until I reached university.

Use past simple 'did not have' and past 'reached' for completed past actions. 'Have had no mobile phones' and 'until I reach' mix tenses incorrectly. 'Mobile phone' singular is natural here.

× So and when I had my mobile phone, I almost lost contact with them. Many of them has been many of them had been have been more have been

✓ When I got a mobile phone, I almost lost contact with them. Many of them had changed their contact information or I lost their contact details.

Original sentence is fragmented and repetitive. 'When I got a mobile phone' is clearer. The latter fragment is incomplete; provide a plausible, grammatically correct completion: 'Many of them had changed their contact information' or 'I lost their contact details.' Use past perfect 'had changed' if referring to an action before another past action.

× My family teacher is my math teacher in primary school.

✓ My favorite teacher was my math teacher in primary school.

'Family teacher' is unclear; likely intended 'favorite teacher' or 'my family’s teacher' which doesn't fit. Use past 'was' to match other past references. Clarify meaning: 'favorite teacher' makes sense in context.

× At first I didn't have much interest on maths, but he was a teaching style and vivid illustrations to inspire my interest on it.

✓ At first I didn't have much interest in math, but his teaching style and vivid illustrations inspired my interest in it.

Use 'interest in' not 'interest on'. 'He was a teaching style' is ungrammatical; correct to 'his teaching style'. Use past tense 'inspired' to match the past context.

× And now and

✓ And now, I am more interested in math.

Original fragment unfinished. Provide a complete sentence in present tense to indicate current state: 'I am more interested in math.' This fits the question asking how teacher helped over time.

× I like my primary school teachers more than my high school teachers because I thought my primary teachers are always patient and should not and present as their interests in their subjects, their attitude to their attitude always always affected positively.

✓ I like my primary school teachers more than my high school teachers because I thought my primary teachers were always patient and presented their enthusiasm for their subjects; their attitude always affected me positively.

Fix tense consistency: use past 'were' if referring to past behavior. Remove contradictory and unclear fragments 'should not and present as their interests'. Use 'presented their enthusiasm' or 'showed interest' for clarity. Remove repeated words and make object 'affected me positively' explicit.