Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more direct and concise with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail using a linking word. Avoid redundancy and keep to 2–3 sentences. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., praised my writing and encouraged me to pursue literature).

예시: I didn't have a single favourite teacher, but I admired my English teacher. She often praised my writing and encouraged me to enter school competitions, which boosted my confidence.

제안: Begin with a direct answer (Yes/No/Maybe) and then briefly explain with a specific reason. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' and avoid repeating ideas. Limit to two sentences.

예시: Yes, I would consider becoming a teacher because I enjoyed imitating lessons as a child and found teaching fulfilling. For example, I used to teach my soft toys, which showed my early interest in helping others learn.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and then give one specific detail that explains why you remember that teacher, using a linking word like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid filler phrases such as 'actually' and 'just'.

예시: Yes, I remember several teachers, but one stands out because my nursery teacher phoned my family recently to check on me. That gesture showed she genuinely cared about my well-being.

제안: Answer directly and then add one concise, specific supporting detail with a linking word like 'however' or 'but'. Avoid listing too many categories together and use natural phrasing (e.g., 'pre-primary' may be unnecessary).

예시: No, I'm not currently in contact with my primary school teachers; however, I visited my high school last year and was able to catch up with a few former teachers.

제안: Provide a clear, grammatically correct topic sentence and one or two specific examples of how the teacher helped, linked logically. Avoid sentence fragments and repetition. Use concrete verbs (e.g., 'identified', 'mentored', 'recommended').

예시: My favourite teacher recognised my passion for English literature and mentored me by recommending books and giving detailed feedback on my essays. As a result, I improved my writing and entered several competitions.

제안: Give a direct comparative answer (I prefer / I don't prefer) and support it with one clear, specific reason using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid vague phrases such as 'I don't know why' and contradictory statements. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer my high school teachers because they were more understanding and offered practical feedback tailored to my needs. For example, my high school English teacher gave personalised advice that helped me improve my essays.

× I used to practice teaching soft toys in my room and pretending to be a teacher.

✓ I used to practice teaching with soft toys in my room and pretend to be a teacher.

The original sentence mixes 'practice teaching' followed by 'pretending' which creates a parallel structure error. After 'used to' the verbs should be parallel: 'practice teaching' can be followed by an object phrase ('with soft toys'), and the second verb should be the base form 'pretend' (not 'pretending') to match 'used to'. Also adding 'with' clarifies that soft toys were the objects used for practice.

× From that point onwards, I felt like this was my very first passion for being a teacher.

✓ From that point onwards, I felt this was my first passion: to be a teacher.

The phrase 'passion for being a teacher' is wordy and slightly awkward. Rephrasing to 'my first passion: to be a teacher' creates a clearer, more natural structure. This corrects a stylistic sentence-structure issue while preserving tense and meaning.

× I had a nursery teacher call me and my parents.

✓ A nursery teacher called me and my parents.

The original uses a causative-like structure 'I had a nursery teacher call me' which is unusual here and can imply you arranged the call. The simple past 'A nursery teacher called me and my parents' is clearer and matches the intended meaning that the teacher phoned them.

× I did visit my high school last year wherein I got to meet a few of them and catch up.

✓ I visited my high school last year, where I met a few of them and caught up.

Use 'where' instead of 'wherein' in conversational English. 'Did visit' is emphatic and unnecessary; simple past 'visited' is natural. Also keep verb tense consistent: 'met' and 'caught up' are the correct simple past forms.

× My favorite teacher has appreciated me, and she was the one who really. Knew my passion in English literature and writing.

✓ My favorite teacher appreciated me, and she was the one who really knew about my passion for English literature and writing.

The original has punctuation breaking the sentence and a tense mismatch: 'has appreciated me' (present perfect) conflicts with 'was the one'. Use simple past 'appreciated' to match 'was'. Remove the erroneous period and use 'knew about my passion for' which is a natural English expression. Also 'passion in' should be 'passion for'.

× I don't think I'm particularly fond of either of them, however, I feel like the high school teachers were much more understanding than the middle school or primary school teachers.

✓ I don't think I'm particularly fond of either, however, I feel the high school teachers were much more understanding than the middle- or primary-school teachers.

'Either of them' is slightly redundant after 'either' and can be shortened. Also hyphenate 'middle- or primary-school teachers' to clearly compare categories. This is a stylistic correction to improve clarity and parallelism.