Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: You did not answer this question directly. Start with a clear topic sentence naming whether you have a favorite teacher, then give 1–2 specific supporting details (what they taught you or a memorable trait). Keep it natural and limit to 3–4 sentences. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I do have a favorite teacher — my primary school teacher. She taught me to read and write patiently, and I remember how kind and encouraging she was. For example, she would stay after class to help me with handwriting, which made a big difference in my confidence.

제안: Your answer is relevant and gives personal background, but contains hesitations and repetition. Begin with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No), then briefly explain reason(s) with one linking phrase. Avoid filler words like "uh" and redundant phrases. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

예시: No, I don't plan to be a teacher; I want to become a diplomat. When I was younger I dreamed of teaching, but as I learned more about international relations I realized diplomacy fits my interests and goals better. For example, diplomacy offers opportunities to work on global issues, which I find more appealing.

제안: Good direct answer and emotional detail, but reduce hesitations and correct minor grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific example of what made her memorable. Use linking words like "because" to explain why she inspired you.

예시: Yes, I do. I still remember my first teacher clearly because she taught me how to read and write with great patience. She was kind and encouraging, which inspired me to keep learning even when I found things difficult.

제안: You answered but the sentence is long and slightly unclear. Start with a direct answer, then give 1–2 short supporting details. Use linking words such as "because" or "however." Correct small grammar points ("I don't" → "No, I'm not").

예시: No, I'm not in regular contact with them because I am now a high school student and rarely see them. However, whenever I meet a former teacher I always smile and greet them because they taught me so much.

제안: The answer attempts to explain but is unclear and contains grammatical errors and hesitations. Provide a clear topic sentence stating one main way she helped you, then give a specific example and use linking words like "for example" or "as a result." Avoid vague phrases like "stay quiet" — be precise (e.g., "stay calm under pressure").

예시: She helped me develop perseverance and self-control. For example, when I struggled with reading she encouraged me to practice patiently and taught me how to stay calm under pressure, which improved my confidence and focus.

제안: Good idea and polite stance, but limit hesitations and tighten language. Start with a clear topic sentence (No, I wouldn't compare them), then give a specific reason or brief example. Use linking words like "because" to make it coherent.

예시: No, I wouldn't compare them because each teacher helped me in different ways. For instance, my primary teachers built my basic skills, while my high school teachers challenge me to think more critically.

× No, no, uh, I will be a diplomat in the future, but when I was young, I used to dream that I would be a teacher in the future. But as I have grown up, I understand that teaching is also good, but uh, the path that I choose is more beneficial and useful for my future.

✓ No, I want to be a diplomat in the future, but when I was young I used to dream of being a teacher. As I have grown up, I understand that teaching is good, but the path I have chosen is more beneficial for my future.

The original mixes future forms awkwardly and repeats 'in the future.' Use 'want to be' for a general future intention and 'used to dream of being' for a past habitual thought. Use present perfect 'have chosen' to link past decision to present; remove redundant words for clarity.

× Umm, I still remember my first teacher who first taught me how to write, how to read, and she was the she's the person that I still remember so clearly and vividly.

✓ I still remember my first teacher who taught me how to write and read; she is the person I remember most clearly and vividly.

Redundant 'first' and awkward 'she was the she's the' phrasing create errors. Use present tense 'is' to indicate the continuing memory. Combine 'write and read' with 'and' and simplify the relative clause for grammatical clarity.

× No I don't since I am a high school student I barely see them in the school but whenever I see them I always look at their face with a smile and always greet with them because they are the ones who taught me everything.

✓ No, I don't. Since I am a high school student I rarely see them at school, but whenever I do see them I always smile at them and greet them because they are the ones who taught me everything.

Multiple issues: 'don't' needs punctuation; 'barely' is awkward, 'rarely' fits better. Use preposition 'at school' not 'in the school.' 'Look at their face with a smile' should be 'smile at them.' 'Greet with them' is incorrect; use 'greet them.' Split long sentence into two for clarity.

× When I was young, my teacher used to without me to a lot of things whatever like I struggled with.

✓ When I was young, my teacher used to help me with many things that I struggled with.

Original sentence lacks the verb 'help' and has misplaced words 'without me to a lot of things whatever.' Use 'used to help me with many things that I struggled with' to express past habitual assistance correctly.

× Uh, the thing that I always find useful is that she taught me to stay quiet even during the hardest time of your life and to stick with under pressure.

✓ The thing I always find useful is that she taught me to stay calm even during the hardest times of my life and to persevere under pressure.

Use 'stay calm' instead of 'stay quiet' for intended meaning; match possessive pronoun 'my life' not 'your life.' 'Stick with under pressure' is ungrammatical; use 'persevere under pressure.' Also make 'times' plural for generality.

× Honestly, I don't actually compare them because all my teachers that I know in my life are all so umm, kind, very uh, open minded persons and I think it would be unfair to compare them.

✓ Honestly, I don't compare them because all the teachers I have known are kind and open-minded, and I think it would be unfair to compare them.

Simplify 'don't actually compare' to 'don't compare.' Use 'the teachers I have known' (present perfect) instead of 'that I know in my life.' Use 'open-minded' as a hyphenated adjective and 'persons' is awkward—use plural 'teachers' or 'people.' Remove filler words for clarity.