Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the teacher and the subject, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and tense errors.

예시: My favourite teacher was Harpreet Kaur, who taught me mathematics from fourth grade. She was very kind and often helped me with personal problems as well as schoolwork, which made me feel supported and close to her.

제안: Make your stance clear with a direct topic sentence and use linking words to explain reasons. Fix grammar (e.g., 'I'm cut out to be' not 'built for be') and avoid repetition.

예시: I like teachers, but I don’t want to become one in the future. Although I admire their work, I don’t think I have the patience required to manage noisy classes and explain concepts repeatedly to different students.

제안: Clarify and correct pronouns and tenses. Give one clear topic sentence about the teacher you remember and then add specific details or examples of what she taught you, using linking words.

예시: Yes, I still remember a teacher named Sonam who taught me IT in ninth grade. She was kind and supportive like a friend, and she taught me life skills such as time management and confidence, which I still use today.

제안: Open with a clear statement and organize the details with linking words. Reduce filler phrases and correct small grammar mistakes (e.g., 'on teachers' day' -> 'on Teachers' Day').

예시: Yes, I am still in touch with some of my primary school teachers; I have their phone numbers. Usually I call them on Teachers' Day or their birthdays, and occasionally I drop by for a brief five-minute visit when I happen to be nearby.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence describing the way she helped, then give the specific example succinctly. Use correct past tense and linkers to make the story coherent.

예시: She helped me both academically and personally; for example, when I had a high fever in fifth grade, she took me out of class, escorted me to the dispensary, and contacted my parents so they could take me home.

제안: Answer directly and organize reasons with linking words. Replace informal phrases ('I got both', 'like') with clearer language and provide one specific contrast.

예시: I prefer my primary school teachers because I was closer to them: I knew them for seven to eight years and they supported me emotionally. By contrast, my high school teachers were more formal and focused only on delivering lectures.

× For her favorite teacher, her name is Harpreet Kaur.

✓ My favorite teacher's name is Harpreet Kaur.

The original sentence misuses pronouns ('her') and an awkward phrase. Use a possessive noun phrase 'My favorite teacher's name is...' to correctly indicate ownership and avoid incorrect pronoun reference.

× I met her then other than fourth standard she used to teach me mathematics in my school and while learning from her I get very close with her because she was so nice and she understood me in several situation apart from my academics and you have teach me a lot apart from my studies too.

✓ I met her in fourth grade; she taught me mathematics at school, and while learning from her I grew very close to her because she was so kind and understood me in many situations beyond academics. She taught me a lot besides my studies.

Multiple issues: incorrect tense ('met her then other than fourth standard'), incorrect verb forms ('used to teach' is okay but context needed), wrong pronoun 'you have teach me', and pluralization/singular issues ('situation'→'situations'). Use past tense consistently for past events, correct verb forms ('grew' not 'get'), correct prepositions ('in fourth grade'), and replace 'you have teach me' with 'she taught me' to keep subject consistent.

× I like teachers, but I don't think so.

✓ I like teachers, but I don't think so.

This sentence is ambiguous but grammatically acceptable; however context requires clarity. No change needed for grammar types listed; keep as is if meaning 'I don't want to be a teacher' is intended. If clarity desired, say 'I like teachers, but I don't think I want to be one.'

× I'm built for be a teacher in the future.

✓ I'm not cut out to be a teacher in the future.

Incorrect idiom and verb form 'built for be'. Use the correct expression 'be cut out to be' or 'suited to be', and include 'to' before the verb 'be'.

× I think I don't have that capability of teaching someone that patiently because there are some students in class which make noises and you have to be that patient to make them understand and keep the class in a proper manner.

✓ I don't think I have the ability to teach someone that patiently because some students in class make noise, and you have to be very patient to make them understand and keep the class in order.

Use 'the ability' instead of 'that capability', correct adverb placement ('teach patiently'), use 'make noise' (uncountable) not 'make noises', and replace 'which' with nothing or 'who' for people. 'That patient' is awkward; 'very patient' is natural. 'Keep the class in a proper manner' → 'keep the class in order'.

× But yeah, I love the way teachers do that.

✓ But yes, I love the way teachers do that.

Minor stylistic change: 'yeah' to 'yes' for formality. Pronoun usage is acceptable; no grammatical error per list.

× Yeah, as I told you her name was her because she used to teach me mathematics when I was in food standard and as well as I have other teacher, her name was Sonam.

✓ As I told you, her name was Harpreet because she taught me mathematics when I was in fourth grade. I also had another teacher named Sonam.

Pronoun confusion ('her name was her') and typo 'food standard' → 'fourth grade'. Use past tense 'taught' not 'used to teach' (both possible), and rephrase 'I have other teacher' to 'I also had another teacher named...'.

× He used to teach me it when I was in 9th standard.

✓ She used to teach me it when I was in ninth grade.

Pronoun 'He' is incorrect for a female teacher 'Sonam'; use 'She'. Also '9th standard' → 'ninth grade' for natural English; 'teach me it' is awkward but acceptable in spoken English — better: 'she taught me that subject.'

× She was so sweet and she was like a friend and a mother to me.

✓ She was so sweet; she felt like both a friend and a mother to me.

Grammar is acceptable but improved wording: 'felt like both a friend and a mother' clarifies meaning. No specific listed error except stylistic.

× Apart from my academics, she have taught me a lot of things which I can use in my life and I'm really grateful to her.

✓ Apart from my academics, she has taught me many things that I can use in my life, and I'm really grateful to her.

Subject-verb agreement: 'she have' → 'she has'. Use 'many things' rather than 'a lot of things' for formality, and 'that' preferred for defining clauses.

× I have their contact number, but I don't usually go down to meet at their home.

✓ I have their contact numbers, but I don't usually go to their homes to visit them.

Pluralize 'contact number' if referring to multiple teachers. 'Go down to meet at their home' is awkward; use 'go to their homes to visit them'. Preposition and word order corrected.

× I think mainly on when it's teachers day or if it's their birthday I call them or maybe sometimes I go to their home.

✓ I usually contact them mainly on Teachers' Day or on their birthdays; sometimes I go to their homes.

Use 'on Teachers' Day' and 'on their birthdays'. 'Go to their home' → 'go to their homes'. Reorder for natural phrasing.

× Sometimes when I'm passing by their house. So I just ring the bell and just 5 minutes I'll go and say hello and hi.

✓ Sometimes when I'm passing by their house, I ring the bell and stop for just five minutes to say hello.

Original had sentence fragments and awkward future-in-present 'I'll go'. Combine into one sentence, use 'stop for just five minutes' and 'say hello' for natural speech.

× My favorite teacher said help me in the office like 1 of what happened.

✓ My favorite teacher helped me in one incident at school.

Original is ungrammatical: 'said help me in the office like 1 of what happened' unclear. Use past tense 'helped' and clarify 'in one incident at school'. Article use corrected and sentence simplified.

× I was having a lot of fever in school when I was in 5th and uh my teacher came to me and she really supported me and helped me to get out of the class and go to dispensary and have my parents to pick me up from school.

✓ I had a high fever at school when I was in fifth grade, and my teacher came to me; she supported me and helped me leave the class, go to the dispensary, and have my parents pick me up from school.

Use simple past 'had' instead of progressive 'was having' for a completed past event. Use 'fifth grade', 'leave the class', 'go to the dispensary', and 'have my parents pick me up' (causative structure) for correct English.

× So I think the other day I realized that she's so sweet and she's so caring.

✓ So the next day I realized that she was so sweet and so caring.

Maintain past tense consistency: realized (past) should be followed by 'she was' not 'she's'. 'The other day' in past narrative → 'the next day' or 'the following day'.

× I got both. The teachers were very nice, but I would go with the primary school teachers because as a child you don't understand some things and you become very close to your teachers.

✓ I had both; the teachers were very nice, but I would choose my primary school teachers because as a child you don't understand some things and you become very close to your teachers.

'I got both' → 'I had both' or 'I experienced both'. 'Go with' → 'choose' more natural. Grammar otherwise acceptable.

× And I have known them from like 7 to 8 years now.

✓ I have known them for about seven or eight years now.

Use 'for' with durations and spell out numbers in general writing. 'Like' is colloquial; 'about' is more standard.

× So I think I'm more close to them than my high school teachers.

✓ So I think I'm closer to them than to my high school teachers.

Use comparative 'closer' not 'more close'. Include 'to' before 'my high school teachers' to complete the comparison structure.

× They're like just come, give their lecture and go.

✓ They just come, give their lecture, and leave.

Use simple present for habitual actions: 'They just come, give their lecture, and leave.' Remove 'like' as filler, and replace 'go' with 'leave' for natural phrasing.

× So I was not very emotionally connected to them.

✓ So I was not very emotionally connected to them.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the past narrative; no change needed.