Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Уточните мысль и используйте более правильную грамматику: ясно назовите качества учителя, приведите конкретные примеры того, чему он вас научил, и свяжите это с вашими планами. Избегайте неясных выражений (например, «the mess») и повторений.

예시: Yes. My favourite teacher was Mr Abru. He taught me study skills and foreign languages, which improved my confidence. For example, he showed practical techniques for memorising vocabulary and correcting pronunciation, and these helped me prepare for university.

제안: Сформулируйте цель чётко и дайте конкретные действия, которые вы предпринимаете. Используйте связки (for example, therefore) и корректную лексику вместо неясных фраз («practices about the mass»).

예시: Yes, I hope to become a teacher. To achieve this I am studying linguistics and practising teaching methods. For example, I regularly attend language workshops and tutor younger students to gain classroom experience.

제안: Сделайте ответ более организованным: начните с утверждения, затем опишите конкретно, что именно учитель сделал и как это повлияло на вас. Уберите грамматические ошибки (например, «he learned to a lot of things»).

예시: Yes, I often remember my primary school teacher. He encouraged me to study hard and taught me study techniques and basic language skills, which later helped me pass the university entrance exam.

제안: Отвечайте прямо и кратко, затем объясните причину. Избегайте неестественных оборотов («Me either») и повторений. Используйте логические связки (because, so).

예시: No, I am not in contact with him anymore because after school we both became busy with our own lives. However, I am very grateful for his help and remember his lessons fondly.

제안: Будьте конкретнее: опишите методы поддержки (например, репетиции экзамена, советы по учёбе) и используйте связки для плавности. Избегайте тавтологии («I passed… passed»).

예시: He helped me by giving exam practice and personalised feedback. For instance, he gave mock tests and corrected my mistakes, which directly improved my scores and helped me get into university.

제안: Избегайте разговорных сокращений («gonna») в официальном контексте. Сформулируйте сравнение чётко и приведите конкретные причины, используя корректную грамматику (his methods were).

예시: Yes, I prefer my primary school teacher because his teaching methods were clear and engaging. For example, he used songs and games to make lessons memorable, which helped me learn more effectively.

× Yeah, absolutely. His name is Abru, who gave me every experience about the study, about the life experience, and he learned a lot of things about the mess, about the foreign languages, and it was really useful to me and to my future.

✓ Yeah, absolutely. His name is Abru. He gave me many experiences related to studying and life, taught me a lot about mistakes and foreign languages, and it was really useful for me and my future.

The student used incorrect relative clause and pronoun structures ('who gave me every experience', 'he learned a lot of things about the mess') and wrong articles. Use 'He' to start a new sentence instead of a relative clause with 'who' after a name when continuing about the same person. Replace 'every experience' with 'many experiences' or 'valuable experience' and 'the mess' with 'mistakes'. Use 'useful for me' instead of 'useful to me'. Suggestion: Break into shorter sentences, use correct pronouns and collocations (useful for, taught me, mistakes).

× Of course, it's my main goal, which I need to reach. And I always regularly try to learn a lot of languages, a lot of practices about the mass and others, and I always try to reach my goals, like to be a teacher.

✓ Of course, it's my main goal, which I need to achieve. I regularly try to learn many languages and practice teaching methods and other skills, and I always try to reach my goals, such as becoming a teacher.

The student used incorrect verb forms and collocations ('reach' for goal is acceptable but 'need to reach' is less natural than 'need to achieve'; 'learn a lot of languages' should be 'learn many languages'; 'a lot of practices about the mass' is unclear). Use gerunds and noun forms correctly: 'practice teaching methods' instead of 'practices about the mass'. Suggestion: Use 'achieve' for goals, 'learn many languages', and 'practice' with an object (practice teaching methods).

× Of course, he's from my primary school who really wanted to do everything to my future and he learned to a lot of things which was really useful to my university and thanks to him I passed the exam for university.

✓ Of course, he is from my primary school. He really wanted to do everything for my future and taught me many things that were very useful for university, and thanks to him I passed the university entrance exam.

Mixed and incorrect pronoun and clause use ('he's from my primary school who' is wrong because 'who' refers to people but clause placement is off). Verb tenses and forms are wrong: 'he learned to a lot of things' should be 'taught me many things'; 'which was really useful to my university' should be 'that were very useful for university'. Suggestion: Separate into clearer sentences, use 'taught me' when a teacher imparted knowledge, and match plural/singular ('things... were').

× Actually, I'm not still in touch with him because he gave me everything which I really wanted to know, which I really wanted to get, and I think it's enough. And he has his own life. Me either. And we need to continue our lives.

✓ Actually, I'm not in touch with him anymore because he gave me everything I wanted to know and I think that's enough. He has his own life, and so do I. We need to continue our lives.

The student used awkward and incorrect pronoun forms ('I'm not still in touch' should be 'not in touch anymore'; 'Me either' is wrong in this context; use 'so do I'). Relative clauses can be simplified. Use 'that's' instead of 'it's' when referring to previous clause. Suggestion: Use 'not... anymore', 'so do I' for agreement, and avoid repeating 'which I really wanted' twice.

× The main support from my teacher was passing the exam for university and I I got it and thanks to him I passed all my exams from my university and right now I'm a student at university.

✓ My teacher's main support helped me pass the university entrance exam, and thanks to him I passed all my university exams; right now I'm a university student.

Sentence is long, repetitive and has a duplication ('I I'). 'Passing the exam for university' is better as 'pass the university entrance exam' and 'exams from my university' should be 'my university exams' or 'university exams'. Suggestion: Remove repetition, fix duplication, and use natural noun phrases like 'university student'.

× If I'm not gonna lie, yeah, of course. Because he's methods to teach people was really beautiful and it was really amazing and understandable and easy to memorize. He really wanted to do everything for his students, to study them.

✓ If I'm not going to lie, yes, of course. His methods for teaching were very good; they were clear, engaging, and easy to remember. He really wanted to do everything for his students and help them learn.

Informal 'gonna' should be 'going to' in formal speech. Pronoun and noun agreement is wrong: 'he's methods' should be 'his methods'; 'was really beautiful' should be 'were very good' (methods plural). 'Easy to memorize' is awkward for teaching; 'easy to remember' or 'easy to understand' is better. 'To study them' is incorrect; use 'help them learn'. Suggestion: Use correct possessive pronoun 'his', ensure subject-verb agreement with plural 'methods were', use formal alternatives to 'gonna', and use natural collocations like 'help them learn'.