Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify and correct grammar, be concise and more specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect pronouns.

예시: Yes. My favorite teacher was my high school literature teacher, Mr. Lee. I first met him in my second year, and I admired his passion for literature and his stylish dressing, which made his lessons lively and memorable.

제안: Give a direct answer and explain concisely why or why not with specific details. Use correct institution vocabulary and linking words to make your idea coherent.

예시: I'm not sure. At the moment I am studying for a graduate degree, so I might become a university professor in the future if I enjoy teaching and research.

제안: Fix grammar and pronoun errors, and complete thoughts. Give a clear topic sentence, then add specific memories and link them with words like 'for example' or 'because'. Keep it to a few coherent sentences.

예시: Yes. I still remember Mr. Lee, my high school literature teacher, because he had a contagious enthusiasm for poetry. For example, when he read poems aloud he used expressive gestures and voice, which made the class feel alive.

제안: Use correct pronouns and tense, and be a bit more specific about frequency or topics. Start with a direct answer then add details using linking words like 'usually' or 'occasionally'.

예시: Yes, I am. We keep in touch occasionally; I usually call one of my primary school teachers every few months to tell him about my studies and how I am doing.

제안: Use consistent past tense and complete the explanation. Give one or two concrete examples of support and link them with words like 'for example' or 'because'.

예시: He helped me a lot during a difficult period. For example, when I faced personal and financial problems, he offered practical advice and encouragement, and he helped me apply for a scholarship so I could continue my studies.

제안: Answer directly and correct word order and grammar. Give a concise reason with a specific supporting detail and link it with 'because' or 'since'.

예시: I prefer my high school teachers because they helped me stay focused on my goals; for instance, my literature teacher gave regular feedback that improved my writing and motivation.

× Yes, I have a teacher who he is my literature teacher in high school.

✓ Yes, I have a teacher who is my literature teacher from high school.

The sentence contains a redundant pronoun 'he' after the relative pronoun 'who'. Use either 'who' to introduce the relative clause or use a separate clause with 'he', not both. Suggestion: say 'a teacher who is...' or 'a teacher; he is...'. Ensure relative clause closes the gap without repeating subject.

× I first met him during my second year of high school.

✓ I first met him during my second year of high school.

This sentence is already correct in past tense; no correction needed. Keep past simple 'met' for a completed action in the past. (Included only to follow instruction 4 to reply each sentence individually.)

× I like his fashion passion.

✓ I like his passion for fashion.

The original phrase 'fashion passion' is awkward because two nouns are placed together without clear relation. Use the noun 'passion' followed by a prepositional phrase 'for fashion' to show what the passion is about.

× Actually I'm not sure, but right now I study my major in the graduate 8 school.

✓ Actually, I'm not sure, but right now I'm studying my major in graduate school.

The original has awkward phrasing 'the graduate 8 school' and mixes simple present with context requiring present continuous. Use 'I'm studying' to indicate current ongoing study and 'graduate school' without the stray '8' or article 'the'. Add a comma after 'Actually' for clarity.

× I could be a professor in a university in the future.

✓ I could become a professor at a university in the future.

Use 'become' rather than 'be' to indicate transition into a role. Use the preposition 'at' with 'a university' when speaking of workplace location. Modal 'could' is acceptable to express possibility.

× Yes, as I mentioned, it's the Mr. Lee was a literature teacher in high school.

✓ Yes, as I mentioned, Mr. Lee was my literature teacher in high school.

The phrase mixes 'it's the' with a past-clause causing ungrammatical structure. Remove 'it's the' and use 'Mr. Lee was my literature teacher' to state the past relationship. Also use 'my' to clarify the teacher belonged to the speaker.

× I like his boys and the attitude for literature.

✓ I liked his voice and his attitude toward literature.

'I like his boys' is likely incorrect (nonsensical) — context suggests 'voice' or 'style' when reading poetry; choose 'voice' if referring to how he read, and 'attitude toward literature' is the correct phrase (use 'toward' or 'towards' with 'attitude'). Use past or present consistently depending on intended meaning; here past 'liked' fits recalling a past teacher.

× When he read the poetry, he was so fascinated.

✓ When he read the poetry, he was so fascinating.

The writer intended to say that his way of reading fascinated listeners. 'He was so fascinated' means he himself was impressed, which likely isn't the intended meaning. Use 'fascinating' (adjective) to describe him, or 'he fascinated us' to show he caused fascination. Ensure subject and object reflect intended meaning.

× I really.

✓ I really enjoyed it.

'I really.' is an incomplete sentence lacking a verb and object. Complete the thought by adding what was felt, e.g. 'I really enjoyed it' or 'I really admired him.' This fixes the sentence-fragment error.

× Yes, luckily we'll still keep in touch occasionally.

✓ Yes, luckily we still keep in touch occasionally.

'We'll still keep in touch' (future 'will') conflicts with 'occasionally' for habitual action; if the meaning is ongoing contact, use present simple 'we still keep in touch occasionally.' If you mean intention to maintain contact in future, 'we'll keep in touch occasionally' is okay. Chosen correction assumes ongoing relationship.

× I sometimes call him and let him know how I am doing.

✓ I sometimes call him and let him know how I am doing.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It correctly uses pronouns 'him' and present continuous 'am doing' to describe ongoing state. (Included for completeness.)

× When I was going through my personal and the financial difficulties in that time, he is very supportive.

✓ When I was going through personal and financial difficulties at that time, he was very supportive.

The sentence mixes past continuous 'was going through' with present 'is very supportive'. Change 'is' to 'was' for past consistency. Also remove the unnecessary 'the' before 'financial difficulties' and use 'at that time' for clarity.

× For example, when I felt uncertain about my future, he always has encouraged me to focus on.

✓ For example, when I felt uncertain about my future, he always encouraged me to focus.

The original uses present perfect 'has encouraged' with a past time reference 'when I felt', causing tense mismatch. Use simple past 'encouraged'. Also 'focus on' needs an object; 'focus' alone can be used, or add 'on my goals' etc. Here 'focus' without 'on' is acceptable. Provide an explicit object if needed: 'focus on my studies.'

× I prefer high my high school teachers more than my primary school teachers because as I mentioned in my high school teachers helps me a lot to stay focused.

✓ I prefer my high school teachers to my primary school teachers because, as I mentioned, my high school teachers helped me a lot to stay focused.

Original has several issues: word order 'high my high school', redundant comparative 'prefer...more than', missing preposition 'to' after 'prefer', and tense/agreement errors 'teachers helps'. Correct by using 'prefer A to B', repositioning commas, and matching plural subject 'teachers' with past verb 'helped'. If referring to ongoing effect, use present 'help' instead of 'helped'.