Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific supporting details with linking words, and avoid redundancy and grammar errors (e.g. possessive forms and verb agreement). Aim for 2–3 sentences and use more precise vocabulary.

예시: Yes. My favorite teacher is Sivan Deepika, who teaches my health management course. She is very supportive and often gives practical advice when I struggle with assignments, which has helped me improve my grades.

제안: Answer directly, then briefly explain the change with clear reasons and correct grammar. Use linking words to show contrast (e.g. "however" or "but") and avoid vague phrases. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, I don't. Although I wanted to be a teacher as a child, I now prefer to become a software developer because I'm fascinated by technology and how modern systems are built.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence naming the teacher and one or two specific examples of how she helped you. Use linking words (e.g. "for example", "for instance") and avoid unclear or idiomatic phrases like "good as gold" which may seem informal. Fix tense and grammar errors.

예시: Yes. I remember a teacher named Ramanipur who supported me during difficult times. For example, she helped me understand difficult topics and gave study strategies that improved my exam scores.

제안: Be concise and specific: state whether you keep in touch, name which teacher, and give one concrete example of how you communicate and how she helps. Correct awkward phrases and redundancy. Use 2–3 sentences and proper tense.

예시: Yes, I still keep in touch with my former English teacher, who taught me two years ago. She often calls to ask about my studies and gives useful advice about career plans, which I appreciate.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence describing the help, then give one specific example with linking words (e.g. "for example", "as a result"). Use correct collocations (e.g. "gave me useful advice", "helped me perform the experiment") and fix grammar and tense errors.

예시: My favourite teacher helped me with chemistry practicals. For example, she explained the procedure step by step and showed me techniques to get accurate results, and as a result I received full marks on that practical.

× Yes I have a favorite teacher as now I am studying about health management course and there is a teacher her name is Sivan Deepika.

✓ Yes, I have a favorite teacher. I am currently studying a health management course, and her name is Sivan Deepika.

Subject-verb agreement and sentence structure: the original sentence is run-on and unclear with repeated subjects ('there is a teacher her name is'). Split into two sentences, use 'I am currently studying a health management course' for proper present continuous usage, and introduce the teacher with 'her name is' linked correctly. Also add commas for clarity.

× She is the best teacher that I've ever had because she always helps me in my every struggle and the problem that I face.

✓ She is the best teacher I've ever had because she always helps me with every struggle and problem I face.

Incorrect use of prepositions/adverbs and word order: 'helps me in my every struggle' is awkward; 'helps me with' is correct collocation. Remove redundant articles ('the problem') and reorder 'problem I face' for natural English.

× Well no I don't want to become a teacher in the future as when I was a child I have passion to become a teacher but now it's not considered as one as I am interested in becoming a software developer.

✓ Well, no. I don't want to become a teacher in the future. When I was a child I had a passion to become a teacher, but now I'm interested in becoming a software developer.

Present tense issue and sentence structure: 'I have passion' should be past 'I had a passion' because it refers to childhood. Break run-on into separate sentences and use contractions consistently; 'it's not considered as one' is unclear so removed and replaced with clear contrast.

× I have lot of interest in technology and how the things are made-up with the help of modern era.

✓ I have a lot of interest in technology and in how things are made in the modern era.

Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and prepositions: 'lot' needs article 'a lot', 'the things' should be general 'things', 'made-up' is wrong here—use 'made', and 'with the help of modern era' is awkward; 'in the modern era' is natural.

× Yes, when I was studying in my seniors can do there was a teacher her name was Ramanipur and she was the best teacher because she supported me in each and every situation and she helped me to tackle the problem that I face in my studies.

✓ Yes. When I was studying in senior school, there was a teacher named Ramanipur who was the best because she supported me in every situation and helped me tackle the problems I faced in my studies.

Sentence structure errors and tense: original is confusing ('studying in my seniors can do'). Use 'senior school' or 'senior classes', 'named' is correct for introducing someone, and past tense 'faced' matches 'was'. Streamline redundant phrases ('each and every').

× Apart from this she intelligently solved a problem as she was good as gold.

✓ Besides, she solved problems intelligently because she was very kind and helpful.

Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and idiom misuse: 'as she was good as gold' is a mixed and informal idiom; rephrase to 'very kind and helpful' to match formal speech. 'Intelligently solved a problem' is acceptable but 'solved problems intelligently' is smoother.

× Well, yes, I'm still in touch with my teachers as currently I talk with my teacher.

✓ Yes, I'm still in touch with my teachers; currently I talk with one of my teachers.

Present tense and clarity: 'as currently I talk with my teacher' is awkward. Use semicolon to link ideas and specify 'one of my teachers' if referring to a specific teacher.

× Two years ago she was my English teacher.

✓ Two years ago she was my English teacher.

Past tense issue: sentence is correct in tense; no change needed. Included here to indicate it matches the allowed types but requires no correction.

× When I got free time, she usually called me and asked about my future, that what you are doing now.

✓ When I got free time, she would usually call me and ask about my future, asking 'What are you doing now?'.

Present tense and reported speech: mixing tenses and incorrect word order 'that what you are doing now'. Use 'would usually call' for habitual past, and quote the direct question with correct word order 'What are you doing now?'.

× And she also helped me to improve my further fruitful future.

✓ She also helped me improve my future prospects.

Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and redundancy: 'further fruitful future' is redundant and unnatural. 'Improve my future prospects' is concise and idiomatic.

× But as I remember reading my senior secondary there was my chemistry practical and at that time I was not able to do a proper experiment and my teacher helped me a lot with doing this by explaining her useful advices and also help me to do the particular experience.

✓ I remember during senior secondary school, in my chemistry practical I was not able to perform the experiment properly, and my teacher helped me a lot by giving useful advice and helping me perform the experiment.

Verb+ -ing and word form issues: 'doing this by explaining her useful advices' is incorrect—'advice' is uncountable (not 'advices') and we say 'giving advice' not 'explaining her advices'. Use 'perform the experiment' rather than 'do the particular experience'. Align verb tenses and forms for clarity.

× Then I got the full marks in that practice.

✓ Then I got full marks for that practical.

Past tense and idiomatic expression: 'the full marks' should be 'full marks', and 'in that practice' should be 'for that practical' (practical exam). Use past tense 'got' is fine; this correction makes the phrase idiomatic.