Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear, coherent and accurate. Start with a direct topic sentence identifying the teacher, use correct pronouns, tenses and articles, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds and contradictory information.

예시: Yes, I do. My favourite teacher at university was Mr. Smith, who taught business management. He was an excellent teacher because he explained complex ideas clearly and often finished class early to answer students’ questions, which made learning very enjoyable.

제안: Give a direct reason and keep language precise. Correct grammar and avoid irrelevant or unclear details. Use linking words to connect your reason and future intention. Ensure vocabulary fits context.

예시: Yes, I do. I want to be a teacher because my favourite teacher inspired me with his passion for teaching, and I enjoy helping others learn. Therefore, I would like to teach in the future to pass on knowledge and support students.

제안: Answer directly naming the teacher or role, then give specific memories or qualities using complete sentences. Avoid unrelated objects and correct grammar (e.g., 'teacher' not 'T-shirt'). Use linking words to add details.

예시: Yes, I remember my kindergarten teacher, Mrs. Lee. She was very kind and patient, and I remember how she read stories to the class every day, which made me love learning from an early age.

제안: Respond directly and use correct verb forms and simple linking phrases. State the reason briefly and add one supporting detail, for example who you do keep in touch with.

예시: No, I am not still in touch with my primary school teachers because I don't have their contact information. However, I still keep in touch with a few classmates from primary school through social media.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence describing the specific help, then give two concise, linked examples of support. Use correct pronouns and verb forms and avoid repetition. Be specific about actions and outcomes.

예시: My favourite teacher helped me with my career development. For example, he taught me how to write a strong resume and often reviewed my applications, which helped me secure interviews at several companies.

× Yes I do he is a magician when I was university and he teach uh the business subject and she really good because the class is 3 hours she leave us early.

✓ Yes, I do. He was my favorite teacher when I was at university; he taught business and was really good because classes were three hours long and he let us leave early.

Multiple sentence structure and verb form errors: run-on sentence, incorrect tense and verb forms, missing preposition 'at', incorrect pronoun 'she' for a male teacher, and missing past tense. Suggest breaking into sentences, use past tense 'was' and 'taught', add 'at university', change 'she' to 'he', and use 'classes were three hours long' and 'let us leave early' for clarity.

× Yes, I do because my, my favorite teacher told me, uh, his our pet is like $300 per hour and I think really good. So I wanna be AT shirt.

✓ Yes, I do, because my favorite teacher told me his rate is about $300 per hour and I think that is really good, so I want to be a teacher.

Pronoun and word choice errors: 'his our pet' is incorrect; likely meant 'his rate'. 'I think really good' needs 'that is' and adjective. 'wanna' is informal; use 'want to', and 'AT shirt' is garbled; likely 'a teacher'. Suggest using correct nouns, clear clause 'I think that is really good', and standard 'want to be a teacher'.

× Guess I have the T-shirt when I was four years old. That is my favorite one as well. She really kind and she looks so beautiful and.

✓ I guess I had a T-shirt when I was four years old; it was my favorite. My teacher was very kind and looked beautiful.

Mixed topics and incorrect tense/pronouns: 'Guess I have the T-shirt when I was four' mixes present and past; use past 'had'. 'That is my favorite one as well' should match past context. 'She really kind and she looks so beautiful and.' lacks verb 'is' and ends abruptly. Suggest separating ideas: one sentence about the T-shirt, one about the teacher, use past tense 'was' and include verbs.

× No I aren't still in touch with them because I don't have any contact so I just have the having touch with my friend in primary school.

✓ No, I'm not still in touch with them because I don't have their contact; I only keep in touch with a friend from primary school.

Incorrect auxiliary and verb agreement: 'I aren't' is wrong; use 'I'm not'. 'have any contact' is acceptable but 'their contact' is clearer. 'having touch' is incorrect collocation; use 'keep in touch' or 'am in touch with'. Suggest correct auxiliary 'am not', and the phrase 'keep in touch with' plus 'a friend from primary school'.

× My first T-shirt he helped me the way to apply for the job and the way that how can I make really good resume. He can he always check my resume for apply for another company.

✓ My first teacher helped me learn how to apply for jobs and how to write a good resume. He always checked my resume when I applied to other companies.

Pronoun and noun confusion: 'T-shirt' should be 'teacher'. Incorrect word order 'the way that how can I make' should be 'how to write'. Verb tense inconsistency: use past 'helped' and 'checked' to match past context. Also 'for apply for another company' is incorrect; use 'when I applied to other companies'. Suggest replace 'T-shirt' with 'teacher', use 'how to' structure, and consistent past tense.