Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: ปรับให้เป็นประโยคที่ชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น กล่าวชื่อเหตุผลที่ชอบโดยตรง และเพิ่มรายละเอียดเฉพาะ เช่น ลักษณะการสอนหรือสิ่งที่คุณได้เรียนรู้ ใช้คำเชื่อมสั้นๆ เช่น “because” หรือ “for example” เพื่อทำให้เชื่อมต่อได้ดีขึ้น จำกัดความยาวไม่เกิน 3-4 ประโยค

예시: Yes, I do. My favorite teacher was my high school physics teacher because she explained difficult concepts clearly and used real-life examples. For example, she demonstrated principles with simple experiments, which helped me understand how science works in everyday life.

제안: คำตอบไม่ชัดเจนและมีความสับสน โฟกัสที่ประโยคตอบตรงคำถามก่อน เช่น “No, I don’t think so” หรือ “I’m not sure.” แล้วอธิบายเหตุผลสั้นๆ โดยใช้ linking word เช่น “because” และตัวอย่างประกอบ ใช้ประโยคไม่เกิน 3 ประโยค

예시: I'm not sure I want to be a teacher in the future because I prefer working in a technical role. However, I believe people can teach others informally at work, for example, by mentoring new colleagues.

제안: ประโยคมีความซ้ำและโครงสร้างผิด ใช้ประโยคเปิดชัดเจน เช่น “Yes, I do.” แล้วอธิบายสั้นๆว่าเพราะอะไร ใช้คำที่เหมาะสม เช่น “identified my weaknesses” และ “encouraged me to improve” รวมทั้งยกตัวอย่างเฉพาะของทักษะที่พัฒนาขึ้น

예시: Yes, I do. I remember a teacher who identified my weaknesses and encouraged me to improve my communication skills. Because of her support, I became more confident speaking in public.

제안: ตอบตรงคำถามด้วยประโยคเปิด เช่น “No, I’m not.” แล้วให้เหตุผลสั้นๆ และเสริมความรู้สึกหรือความทรงจำเฉพาะ ใช้คำเชื่อมอย่าง “because” หรือ “although” เพื่อเชื่อมความคิด

예시: No, I'm not still in touch with my primary school teachers because many of them retired long ago. Although I don't contact them, I still remember their kindness and important lessons.

제안: ประโยคไม่ชัดเจนและมีคำศัพท์ผิด เลือกคำที่เหมาะสมเช่น “helped me reflect,” “inspired me,” และ “supported me” ตอบโดยเริ่มประโยคด้วยหัวข้อที่ชัดเจนและตามด้วยตัวอย่างที่เป็นรูปธรรม เช่น กิจกรรมหรือคำพูดที่ช่วยคุณพัฒนา จำกัดความยาว 2-3 ประโยค

예시: She helped me reflect on my strengths and inspired me to pursue work I enjoy. For example, she encouraged me to try new projects and gave constructive feedback that improved my skills.

× For example, when I was in high school, I was studying scientists in the subject of physics.

✓ For example, when I was in high school, I studied scientists in my physics class.

The sentence uses a continuous past tense 'was studying' which is acceptable but less natural here; the simple past 'studied' better fits a completed action. Also 'in the subject of physics' is awkward; 'in my physics class' is clearer. Use simple past for habitual or completed past study.

× I have known her to talk about some the principle of physics.

✓ I remember her talking about some of the principles of physics.

'Have known' is incorrect in this context; the present perfect 'have known' with 'to talk' is ungrammatical. Use 'remember' + gerund 'talking' or 'I have heard her talk' if emphasizing experience. Also 'some the principle' is incorrect: use 'some of the principles'.

× I am not sure that I can I could be a teacher in the future but I think every occupations can be a teacher.

✓ I am not sure that I could be a teacher in the future, but I think anyone in any occupation can teach.

The modal verbs 'can' and 'could' are mixed incorrectly; choose 'could' for uncertainty about the future. 'Every occupations' is wrong: use 'anyone in any occupation' or 'people in every occupation'. Also 'can be a teacher' is better expressed as 'can teach'.

× We thought everybody such as a Co partner, colleague to this something done.

✓ We thought of everyone—such as coworkers or colleagues—as able to help get things done.

The original sentence lacks clear structure and has incorrect fragments like 'to this something done.' Rephrase with a clearer subject and verb. Use 'coworkers' or 'colleagues' and an explanation of their role ('able to help get things done').

× I I have a teacher from my past that I can still remember her because she poured out my weakness and encouraged the skill that I should improve and becoming to me in this day.

✓ I have a teacher from my past whom I still remember because she pointed out my weaknesses, encouraged the skills I should improve, and has been an influence on me to this day.

The sentence has redundant pronouns ('that I ... her') — use 'whom' or restructure without a pronoun. 'Poured out my weakness' is incorrect; use 'pointed out my weaknesses'. 'Encouraged the skill that I should improve' should be 'encouraged the skills I should improve'. 'Becoming to me in this day' should be 'has been an influence on me to this day' or 'continues to influence me'.

× I never had the occasions to contact with my primary school teachers.

✓ I never had the opportunity to contact my primary school teachers.

'Occasions' is awkward; 'opportunity' or 'occasion' is better. Do not use 'contact with' after 'contact' in this context: use 'contact my teachers' or 'get in touch with my teachers'.

× Some teachers may be retired or pass away for a long time, but everybody still in my mind.

✓ Some teachers may have retired or passed away a long time ago, but they are all still in my mind.

Use present perfect 'may have retired' and past participle 'passed away'. 'For a long time' should be 'a long time ago'. Also include a verb: 'they are all still in my mind.'

× They help me to have a cell reflections and find out my inspirations to be a person who interested in my work and he support every racial time to find something new.

✓ They helped me reflect and discover my inspirations to become a person who is interested in my work, and they supported me every time to find something new.

Subject-verb agreement: 'They help' should match tense and form; past 'helped' or present 'help' consistently. 'A cell reflections' is nonsensical; use 'reflect' or 'self-reflection'. 'Person who interested' needs 'who is interested'. 'He support every racial time' is unclear and ungrammatical; likely 'they supported me every time' or 'they encouraged me repeatedly'. Ensure pronouns agree (they) and verbs match tense.