Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific routine and brief reason. Avoid minor grammar errors (e.g., "every weekend" not "in every weekend") and redundant phrases.

예시: Yes, I do. I like to keep my room and cupboard organized. For example, I declutter my cupboard every weekend and put things back in their places so I can find them easily.

제안: Provide a clearer, complete response and avoid unfinished or unclear phrases. Use one or two supporting details and a linking word. Correct grammar: "used to" is fine, but clarify the grandmother's opinion and finish the idea.

예시: Not really. My mother always tidied my room, so I wasn't responsible for it. However, my grandmother sometimes asked me to help because she believed children should learn to tidy up from an early age.

제안: Be more natural and use smoother linking. Avoid awkward phrasing like "every second day" (use "every other day") and "household servant" (use "housekeeper" or "assistant"). Mention specific actions you take to organize the space.

예시: I keep my study space tidy by decluttering it every other day and wiping the surface daily. I also have a housekeeper who helps with general cleaning, while I organize my books and stationery myself.

제안: Make your argument more concise and natural. Use a linking word and give a specific reason or short example to support your opinion. Correct small unnatural phrases like "your mind is more into the things."

예시: Yes, definitely. Being tidy helps me focus because I can find what I need quickly and there are fewer distractions. For instance, when my desk is organized I complete tasks faster and with fewer mistakes.

× Yes, I do like keeping the things tidy because I don't like when my room is not organized or my cupboard is cluttered.

✓ Yes, I do like keeping things tidy because I don't like it when my room is not organized or my cupboard is cluttered.

The phrase 'the things tidy' incorrectly uses the definite article 'the'; use the general noun 'things' without an article. Also add 'it' before 'when' to make the clause grammatical: 'I don't like it when...'. Suggestion: remove unnecessary definite articles and insert 'it' for clarity.

× I prefer decluttering my cupboard in every weekend.

✓ I prefer decluttering my cupboard every weekend.

The phrase 'in every weekend' is ungrammatical; use the adverbial phrase 'every weekend' without 'in'. Use 'every' directly with the time noun. Suggestion: say 'every weekend' or 'on weekends'.

× As a child, I was not very keen on keeping my room tidy because my mother used to do everything for me.

✓ As a child, I was not very keen on keeping my room tidy because my mother used to do everything for me.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses 'used to' to describe habitual past. Included here to show it matches the allowed list; no change required.

× At times my grandmother used to ask me to do it and she also used to feel that girls should get into.

✓ At times my grandmother used to ask me to do it, and she also used to feel that girls should be taught to do it.

The original sentence ends with an incomplete phrase 'girls should get into' which is unclear and ungrammatical. Corrected by completing the idea: 'girls should be taught to do it.' Suggestion: ensure that comparative or opinion clauses are complete and use passive 'be taught' to express being instructed.

× I declutter my study table after every second day and also I have kept one household servant.

✓ I declutter my study table every other day, and I also have a household helper.

The phrase 'after every second day' is awkward; use 'every other day'. 'I have kept one household servant' is unnatural in modern English; use 'I have a household helper' or 'I employ a household helper.' Also improve word order by adding a comma before 'and'.

× She keeps it clean every day.

✓ She keeps it clean every day.

This sentence is correct: third person singular 'keeps' is used properly. Included for completeness; no change needed.

× If you are tidy, you are more focused and your mind is more into the things and you concentrate better on what you are doing.

✓ If you are tidy, you are more focused, your mind is more on the task, and you concentrate better on what you are doing.

The phrase 'your mind is more into the things' is awkward and unidiomatic. Replace with 'your mind is more on the task' to convey focus. Also use commas to separate coordinated elements. Suggestion: prefer 'on the task' or 'on what you are doing.'

× If it is messy, so your mind goes into the things which are nearby.

✓ If it is messy, your mind gets distracted by nearby things.

Including 'so' after 'If' is incorrect; conditional clauses do not use 'so' there. The phrase 'your mind goes into the things which are nearby' is awkward; use 'gets distracted by nearby things.' Suggestion: avoid redundant conjunctions and use natural collocations like 'get distracted by.'