Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and directly addresses the question, but you can improve by making it more natural and adding a short specific example to support your reason. Use a linking phrase to connect the topic sentence and the supporting detail. Also avoid repeating words (e.g., "things"). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I like to keep my belongings tidy because an orderly space helps me concentrate. For example, when my desk is neat I can find my notes quickly and study for longer without interruptions.

제안: Your answer attempts to explain but has grammatical mistakes, unclear phrasing and is a bit long and repetitive. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one concise specific example using linking words (e.g., "for example"). Correct tense and sentence structure ("When I was a child, I didn't keep my room tidy") will make you sound more natural.

예시: When I was a child, I didn't keep my room tidy. For example, after coming home from school I often threw my uniform on the sofa instead of putting it away.

제안: Good content — you explain a routine — but the sentences are slightly repetitive and some phrasing is awkward. Start with a clear topic sentence, use a linking word to add detail, and be specific about what you do when you clean (e.g., "organise papers, wipe surfaces"). Keep it within 2–4 concise sentences.

예시: I clean my study space on a fixed schedule, usually every weekend. For instance, I organise my papers, tidy my bookshelf and wipe my desk, which helps me stay disciplined and focused during the week.

제안: Your opinion is clear but the grammar and word choice reduce clarity. Avoid repeating phrases and use linking words to contrast ideas (e.g., "however"). Be specific about why you think tidiness is optional and give a brief example. Use correct verb forms (e.g., "keep" not "are keep").

예시: I don't think being tidy is strictly necessary; however, it works well for some people. For example, several of my friends keep messy rooms but still meet deadlines, so I see tidiness as a personal habit rather than a requirement.

× Yes, I do like to keep my things tidy because it helps me gain more focus.

✓ Yes, I do like to keep my things tidy because they help me gain more focus.

The subject 'my things' is plural, so the pronoun referring back should be 'they' rather than 'it'. Use matching number for pronouns to avoid mismatch.

× Will as a child I would say no because I used to be a very naughty and problem causing child while for example after coming back from school to home I used to throw my school dress on my sofa on my.

✓ Well, as a child I would say no because I used to be a very naughty and troublesome child; for example, after coming home from school I used to throw my school uniform on the sofa.

Multiple issues: 'Will' should be 'Well' (word choice) and sentence structure is awkward. 'Problem causing' is not idiomatic; 'troublesome' fits. 'From school to home' should be 'coming home from school'. 'School dress' is better as 'school uniform'. Ending 'on my' is incomplete; remove 'my'. Use past habitual 'used to' correctly and simplify clauses for clarity.

× I have fixed days that I would clean my study desk and my room on that specific day.

✓ I have fixed days when I clean my study desk and my room.

Mixing present simple habit with conditional 'would' is incorrect. Use present simple 'clean' for routines: 'I have fixed days when I clean...' also 'on that specific day' is redundant.

× On every weekend that I clean my room and my desk.

✓ Every weekend I clean my room and my desk.

Sentence fragment due to extra 'that' and incorrect word order. Use simple subject-verb order for habitual actions: 'Every weekend I clean...'.

× It helps me to stay more disciplined and consistent.

✓ They help me stay more disciplined and consistent.

Refers back to 'my room and my desk' (plural), so use plural pronoun 'they' instead of 'it'. Also 'to stay' can be simplified to 'stay'.

× I don't think it is necessary because a lot of my friends are keep their things very complex and do not keep their things very tidy.

✓ I don't think it is necessary because a lot of my friends keep their things in a messy way and do not keep them very tidy.

Incorrect use of 'are keep' (auxiliary not needed). 'Very complex' is wrong collocation for messy belongings; use 'in a messy way' or 'messy'. Also replace the repeated 'their things' with 'them' for clarity and concision.

× So still things workout for works out for them.

✓ Still, things work out for them.

Redundant and incorrect forms 'workout', 'works out'. Use correct phrasal verb 'work out' and correct subject-verb agreement: 'things work out'. Remove duplicate words.

× So I would say it is not a mandatory thing, it's a self belief and a self practice.

✓ So I would say it is not mandatory; it is a matter of personal belief and personal practice.

'A mandatory thing' is awkward; 'not mandatory' suffices. 'Self belief' and 'self practice' are not natural collocations in this context; use 'personal belief' and 'personal practice'. Also replace the comma splice with a semicolon or separate sentences.