Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with verb tenses and article use, reduce hesitations and avoid extra words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Keep within 3–4 sentences and correct small grammar errors (e.g., 'A neat environment helps me...'; 'I also encourage my kids...').

예시: Yes, I do. A neat environment helps me stay disciplined and focused, so I tidy up at the start of the day to feel calmer and more motivated. For example, I make my bed and clear my desk each morning, which helps me begin work productively.

제안: Improve sentence structure and article/noun agreement, and avoid trailing off. Provide one clear example and a linking phrase to connect ideas. Correct phrases like 'a good habits' to 'good habits' and remove unnecessary cultural details unless brief and relevant.

예시: Yes, I did. My grandmother was very strict, so from a young age she made me put my things away every night, which helped me develop good habits and respect for cleanliness. Because cleanliness is important in our family, we also say a short prayer after cleaning the house.

제안: Avoid filler phrases and typos; be precise and concise. Use correct capitalization and articles, and finish sentences completely. Use linking words to list tidy habits (for example, 'First, ... Then, ...') and give specific examples of what you organize.

예시: I usually arrive an hour early to organize my desk and sanitize surfaces. First, I file papers into folders and put devices in their designated spots; then I wipe the desk so I'm ready to start work at 9:30. Doing this helps me stay focused throughout the day.

제안: Correct subject-verb agreement and remove hesitations. Use linking words to explain benefits and provide a specific, concise example. Fix phrases like 'Staying organized help' -> 'Staying organized helps' and 'hospital UH cleaners' -> 'in hospitals, cleanliness'.

예시: Yes, I think being tidy is necessary. Staying organized helps people focus and reduces stress, benefiting them both physically and mentally. For example, in hospitals, cleanliness prevents infection and helps patients trust the care they receive.

× I like to keep my things tidy and organized because NEAT environment helped me stay disciplined and focused.

✓ I like to keep my things tidy and organized because a neat environment helps me stay disciplined and focused.

Error: 'helped' is past tense/past participle but the sentence expresses a general, present-time reason. Use present simple 'helps' to match the habitual statement. Also 'NEAT' should be lowercase and needs the article 'a' before 'neat environment'. Suggestion: Use present simple for general facts and include appropriate articles.

× Tidying up at the start of the day makes me feel calmer and more motivated so I can begin my work productively.

✓ Tidying up at the start of the day makes me feel calmer and more motivated, so I can begin my work productively.

Error: sentence is mostly correct grammatically but needs a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'so' to separate the clauses for clarity. Suggestion: Add the comma to improve sentence flow.

× And I also encouraged my kids to declutter their room before, uh, going.

✓ And I also encourage my kids to declutter their room before going out.

Error: 'encouraged' is past; the context implies a habitual action, so present simple 'encourage' is correct. Also phrase 'before, uh, going' is incomplete; specify 'going out' or 'going to school' to complete the verb phrase. Suggestion: Use present simple for habits and supply the object of 'going'.

× Definitely my grandmother was very strict, so from a very young age she made me put my things away every evening, which helped me develop a good habits and respect for cleanliness.

✓ Definitely my grandmother was very strict, so from a very young age she made me put my things away every evening, which helped me develop good habits and respect for cleanliness.

Error: 'a good habits' mixes singular article with plural noun. Remove the article 'a' to correctly use the plural 'good habits'. Suggestion: Match articles to noun number: use 'a' with singular nouns and none with plural nouns.

× Traditionally, cleanliness is highly valued in our family and we often perform a brief prayer after cleaning the house and.

✓ Traditionally, cleanliness is highly valued in our family, and we often perform a brief prayer after cleaning the house.

Error: Sentence ends with an extraneous conjunction 'and' creating an incomplete structure. Remove the trailing 'and' and add a comma before 'and' to join independent clauses. Suggestion: Ensure sentences do not finish with dangling conjunctions.

× I usually arrive at Work Please an hour early to organize my desk and sanitize my surfaces.

✓ I usually arrive at work an hour early to organize my desk and sanitize my surfaces.

Error: 'Work Please' is incorrect capitalization and contains stray word 'Please'. Use lowercase 'work' and remove 'Please'. Suggestion: Proofread for accidental insertions and use lowercase for common nouns.

× I put papers into the folder and store device in their designated spots and wipe the desk so I'm ready to start work at 9:30 AM in the morning.

✓ I put papers into folders and store devices in their designated spots, and wipe the desk so I'm ready to start work at 9:30 AM.

Error: Mismatch between singular/plural: 'the folder' then plural 'papers' and singular 'device' with plural possessive 'their'. Make number consistent: use plural 'folders' and 'devices' with 'their'. Also '9:30 AM in the morning' is redundant; 'AM' or 'in the morning' suffices. Suggestion: Keep noun numbers consistent and avoid redundant time phrases.

× Doing this helps me stay focused and keeps.

✓ Doing this helps me stay focused and stay productive.

Error: The second conjunct 'keeps' is incomplete and lacks an object. Replace with a complete phrase such as 'stay productive' or 'keeps me focused' to complete the thought. Suggestion: Ensure coordinated verbs have parallel and complete structures.

× I think being tidy is necessary. Staying organized help people focus and reduce stress, which benefit them both physically and mentally.

✓ I think being tidy is necessary. Staying organized helps people focus and reduce stress, which benefits them both physically and mentally.

Error: Subject-verb agreement: 'Staying organized' (singular gerund) requires 'helps' not 'help'; similarly, 'which' refers to the singular idea and needs 'benefits' not 'benefit'. Suggestion: Ensure verbs agree with singular gerund subjects and relative clauses.

× In places like hospital UH cleaners is especially important because it prevents infection and helps patient trust the care they receive.

✓ In places like hospitals, hygiene/cleaning is especially important because it prevents infection and helps patients trust the care they receive.

Errors: 'hospital' should be plural 'hospitals' when generalizing. 'UH cleaners' appears to be filler; replace with 'hygiene' or 'cleaning'. 'is' should agree with the chosen noun; 'helps patient' needs plural 'patients'. Also add comma after introductory phrase. Suggestion: Use correct pluralization for general statements, choose appropriate noun (hygiene/cleaning), and ensure noun-verb agreement.