Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with minor grammar mistakes and some awkward phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and correct word choice (e.g. "when I am later" is incorrect). Use one linking phrase and one or two supporting details. Aim for more natural collocations like "clear my room regularly" or "declutter my room".

예시: Yes, I do. I believe how you maintain your space reflects your standards, so I clear my room regularly. For example, I tidy up every weekend and put things back in their places, which improves my mood and helps me concentrate better.

제안: Correct tense and subject-verb agreement errors and tighten the answer into two or three clear sentences. Begin with a direct topic sentence ("Yes, I did") then provide specific supporting details with linking words like "because" or "for example." Avoid long run-on sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. My mother always told me to tidy up: she taught me to make my bed and organise my toys, and she rewarded me when I kept things in order, so tidiness became a habit.

제안: Use clearer vocabulary and shorter sentences. Fix incorrect word choices ("smoke containers" is wrong) and add linking words to improve cohesion. Provide specific examples and one clear result. Keep within 3–4 sentences maximum.

예시: I tidy my desk every morning and again in the evening so I can start each day with a clear workspace. I use small boxes and cable organizers for chargers, stationery and important papers, which helps me find things quickly and work more efficiently.

제안: This answer is strong but slightly repetitive. Start with a concise topic sentence, then give one specific reason and one short example. Replace vague phrases with precise language and use a linking word like "because" or "for instance."

예시: Yes, I do, because being tidy helps me focus and be more productive. For instance, when my desk is organised I can find documents immediately and complete tasks faster.

× So I usually clear my room when I am later.

✓ So I usually clear my room when I am done later.

The original sentence uses 'when I am later' which is ungrammatical. The intended meaning is likely 'when I am done' or 'later on.' Use a present tense clause 'when I am done' to indicate a time when the action occurs. Suggestion: replace 'when I am later' with 'when I am done' or 'later.'

× My mom always tell me to do that.

✓ My mom always tells me to do that.

Subject 'My mom' is third person singular, so the verb must take the -s form in present simple: 'tells' instead of 'tell.' Ensure subject-verb agreement for third person singular subjects.

× When I was a child she taught me simple routines like making my beds and organizing my toys and rewarded me when I keep things in order so it became a habit.

✓ When I was a child she taught me simple routines like making my bed and organizing my toys and rewarded me when I kept things in order, so it became a habit.

Multiple tense/number errors: 'making my beds' should be singular 'making my bed.' The clause 'rewarded me when I keep things' mixes past and present; both should be past: 'kept.' Also add a comma before 'so' to separate clauses. Use consistent past tense throughout a narrative about childhood.

× I clear my desk every morning and again in the evening so I can start each day with a tidy focus workspace and I also put some boxes and smoke containers for cables, stationery and important papers which helps me find things quickly and keep the area tidy.

✓ I clear my desk every morning and again in the evening so I can start each day with a tidy, focused workspace, and I also put some boxes and small containers for cables, stationery and important papers, which help me find things quickly and keep the area tidy.

Several issues: 'tidy focus workspace' is incorrect adjective order and form; use 'tidy, focused workspace.' 'Smoke containers' is likely a typo for 'small containers.' The relative clause 'which helps me' refers to plural 'boxes and small containers ... papers' so use plural verb 'help.' Also add commas for clarity.