Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, use correct verbs and vocabulary (e.g., 'find' instead of 'phone'), and limit to 2–4 sentences. Add a specific example to support your point.

예시: Yes, I like to keep things tidy because it makes it easier to find items when I need them. For example, I always label my folders and put my keys in a bowl by the door, which saves me time and reduces stress.

제안: Reduce hesitation and correct word choice. Begin with a direct answer, use past-tense correctly, and replace 'tight' with 'tidy' or 'neat'. Finish your thought with a clear reason and a brief supporting detail or example.

예시: Yes, I used to keep my bedroom very tidy because it was a family rule. For example, my mother required us to make our beds and put toys away before watching TV, so I developed the habit early.

제안: Remove fillers and correct grammar. Use a clear topic sentence, employ linking words (e.g., 'so' or 'therefore'), and give a specific routine or method. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and finish the final thought.

예시: I keep my study space tidy by clearing my desk after each session and returning items to designated spots. For instance, I store pens in a cup and put books on a shelf, so my desk is ready for the next time I work.

제안: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Use precise vocabulary (replace 'tight' with 'tidy' or 'organized'), give a clear reason and one concrete benefit, and limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I believe being tidy is important because it saves time and reduces stress. For example, an organized kitchen makes it quicker to prepare meals and more pleasant to have guests over.

× It is because when I keep things tidy, it will be easier for me to phone them later.

✓ It is because when I keep things tidy, it is easier for me to find them later.

The original uses 'will be' which is unnecessary for a general truth; simple present is appropriate after 'when' for habitual or general situations. Also 'phone them' is incorrect contextually; likely meant 'find them'. Use present simple for general facts and correct verb choice.

× Also, I can feel more calm when I organize things well.

✓ Also, I can feel calmer when I organize things well.

'More calm' is grammatically acceptable but 'calmer' is the more natural comparative adjective form. Use 'calmer' for conciseness and naturalness.

× It can helps me to follow my old habits and give me some confidence in finding things.

✓ It can help me to follow my old habits and give me some confidence in finding things.

After modal-like 'can' the base form of the verb should be used ('help' not 'helps'). Keep infinitive 'to follow' or use base verb after 'can' accordingly.

× Yes, uh, when I was a child I used to keep my uh, bedroom very tight, uh, back then.

✓ Yes, uh, when I was a child I used to keep my, uh, bedroom very tidy back then.

'Tight' is incorrect to describe a tidy bedroom; the appropriate adjective is 'tidy'. Also remove redundant commas for clarity.

× It is because it is one of our uh, house rule to keep everything clean.

✓ It is because it is one of our house rules to keep everything clean.

'One of our' must be followed by a plural noun ('house rules'), not singular 'house rule'. This is a common quantifier agreement error.

× My mom always said uh, you can only do more things after you umm.

✓ My mom always said, 'You can only do other things after you finish.'

Original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Clarify the intended meaning: mother likely meant you can do other things after you finish (cleaning). If keeping indirect speech, remove pauses and complete the clause. Use quotation marks in explanation only; in correction present a completed sentence.

× Well, uh, I only have one study or work desk, uh, in my apartment.

✓ Well, uh, I only have one desk for study and work in my apartment.

Redundant phrasing 'study or work desk' is awkward. Combine into 'desk for study and work' for natural English and correct word order.

× So every time I use something, uh, on that table, I after I use it, I will just put everything back to its old space.

✓ So every time I use something on that table, after I use it I just put everything back in its place.

Remove redundant clause structure and fix preposition: 'put back in its place' is idiomatic. Also change future 'will just' to present 'just put' for habitual action.

× It help me keep organized and give me some confidence and.

✓ It helps me stay organized and gives me some confidence.

Subject-verb agreement requires 'helps' and 'gives' for singular subject 'It'. Also 'stay organized' is more natural than 'keep organized'. Remove trailing 'and'.

× Uh, a nice and tight space can give you more confidence and can make people come, especially when they are trying to find something.

✓ Uh, a nice and tidy space can give you more confidence and can help people, especially when they are trying to find something.

'Tight' is incorrect for 'tidy'; 'tidy' describes neatness. 'Make people come' is unclear — likely intended 'help people' or 'help visitors find things.' Use 'help' for clarity.

× It is always good to umm, keep everything organized so it will be easier for you next time.

✓ It is always good to, um, keep everything organized so it is easier for you next time.

Use present simple 'is' for general truths or habitual outcomes rather than 'will be'. Maintain tense consistency.