Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., use 'a tiny space' not 'a tiny little space') and avoid filler words like 'well' or 'like'.

예시: Yes, I enjoy keeping things tidy. For example, I organize my desk and drawer every evening so I can find items quickly, which helps me stay focused while working.

제안: Use past tense consistently and give a clear reason with one specific example. Replace informal slang ('wanna', 'stuff') with standard language and avoid trailing off. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, I didn't usually keep my room tidy when I was a child because I preferred playing. For instance, I would leave toys on the floor after playing and only tidy up when my parents reminded me.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and then list specific methods using linking words (e.g., 'Firstly', 'For example'). Correct grammar (singular/plural agreement: 'a compartment for each category', 'notebooks') and avoid filler words.

예시: I keep my study space tidy by using separate compartments for different items. For example, I have one compartment for books, another for notebooks, and a small tray for pens and stationery, which makes everything easy to find.

제안: Provide a concise opinion followed by one or two clear reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repeating 'I think' and check verb forms ('creates' not 'is just create'). Use a stronger concluding phrase rather than 'more reliving'.

예시: Yes, I believe being tidy is important because it helps me concentrate and reduces stress. Although tidying can be tiring, the result is rewarding since a neat environment improves my mood and productivity.

× Well, as a child I don't really keep my things tidy, not to mention my room because it's just very boring for for like a kid to tidy up your room and stuff. We just wanna play instead of.

✓ Well, as a child I didn't really keep my things tidy, not to mention my room, because it's just very boring for a kid to tidy up their room. We just wanted to play instead.

The sentence describes past habits, so past tense should be used (didn't, wanted). Also use 'a kid' (not 'for for like a kid') and replace 'your' with 'their' for general reference. 'Wanna' is informal; use 'wanted to'. Remove duplicated 'for' and clarify structure.

× Well, for my task I have a compartment for each categories.

✓ Well, for my tasks I have a compartment for each category.

'Each' should be followed by a singular noun ('category'), and 'task' should be plural if referring generally to different tasks. Use 'tasks' and 'category' to match number agreement.

× Let's say there's one categories for books and then there's the other for notebook and then there's other for like just my stationery.

✓ Let's say there's one category for books, another for notebooks, and another for just my stationery.

Use singular 'category' after 'one' and plural 'notebooks' to match general items. Use parallel structure: 'one..., another..., and another...'. Include articles as needed ('another').

× So yeah, I use different like organizer and compartment.

✓ So yeah, I use different organizers and compartments.

Use plural nouns 'organizers' and 'compartments' to agree with 'different'. Remove filler 'like'. The original used singular nouns incorrectly.

× I think it's very necessary to be tidy because it helps you to think straight, because I think a messy space is just create more stress.

✓ I think it's very necessary to be tidy because it helps you think clearly; I think a messy space just creates more stress.

Use present simple for general truths ('helps', 'creates'). Remove extra 'to' after 'helps' and change 'create' to 'creates' to agree with singular subject 'a messy space'. Replace 'think straight' with 'think clearly' for natural phrasing.

× Although it's kind of like tiring to tidy up, but the end result is more reliving.

✓ Although tidying up can be tiring, the end result is more relieving.

Use gerund 'tidying up' as the subject, and avoid redundant 'although...but'. Use 'relieving' (adjective) not 'reliving'. 'Can be' is more natural than 'it's kind of like tiring'.