Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 表現をより自然で文法的に正しい形に直し、冗長さを避けること。具体的には動詞の形（“keep”→“keeping”）や重複表現（“when I when”）を修正し、理由と習慣を短く明確に分けて述べると良いです。また、接続詞（because, so）を整理して一文に詰め込みすぎないようにしましょう。

예시: Yes, I like keeping things tidy because I can't concentrate when my room is messy. For that reason, I usually organize my belongings every day so I can study more effectively.

제안: 文法と語順の修正が必要です。否定の表現は“Not”だけで始めず、“No, I didn’t”など明確に答えてから説明を付け加えましょう。語彙（"awful messy"→"awfully messy"または"very messy"）、口語のフィラー（umm）は減らし、頻度を示す表現（"almost every day"）は正しい位置で使います。短い文で過去の習慣と結果を分けて説明すると効果的です。

예시: No, I didn't. My room was very messy because I used to leave toys and picture books everywhere, so my mother would tell me to clean up almost every day.

제안: 単語の誤用（"cream"→"clean"）を直し、動作と頻度を明確に分けましょう。支持の詳細は具体例を加えると良いです（例えばどこに置くか、どのように整理するか）。接続詞は一つにまとめて簡潔に述べること。

예시: I usually put items back in their designated places and clean my desk once a week. For example, I keep pens in a holder and store documents in labeled folders to remain organized.

제안: 最初の短い否定は誤解を招くので明確にしましょう（"I don't think it's necessary to be perfectly tidy"など）。繰り返し（"all all"）を直し、対比を示す接続詞（but）を用いて理由を添えると説得力が増します。具体例や状況（家で vs 職場で）を一つ加えるとより良いです。

예시: I don't think it's necessary to be perfectly tidy. It's enough to keep a space reasonably clean, because expecting perfect tidiness all the time is unrealistic—for instance, I relax my standards at home after a busy day.

× I'm into keep things tidy because I can't concentrate when I when my room is messy, so I usually try to keep everything organized in my room.

✓ I'm into keeping things tidy because I can't concentrate when my room is messy, so I usually try to keep everything organized in my room.

Use verb+ -ing after 'be into'. Replace 'keep' with 'keeping'. Also remove the duplicated 'when'. Suggestion: Learn verbs that require gerunds (e.g., 'be into', 'enjoy', 'avoid') and practice forming gerund clauses.

× Not worry my room was awful messy because I used to leave my toys umm picture books everywhere so my mom always told me clean up your room most almost every day.

✓ Not to worry, my room was awfully messy because I used to leave my toys and picture books everywhere, so my mom always told me to clean up my room almost every day.

Original lacks connectors and correct infinitive and adverb forms. Add 'Not to worry' as phrase, change 'awful messy' to 'awfully messy' (adverb modifying adjective), insert 'and' between nouns, add 'to' before 'clean up' and correct word order 'almost every day'. Suggestion: Pay attention to sentence connectors, adverb/adjective forms and use 'to' before verbs after verbs like 'told' when reporting commands.

× I usually put things back where they belong and cream my desk once a week so it helps me stay organized.

✓ I usually put things back where they belong and clean my desk once a week, so it helps me stay organized.

The verb 'cream' is a misspelling; correct verb is 'clean'. Also add a comma before 'so'. Suggestion: Proofread for typos and ensure verbs match intended meaning.

× I don't think so. I think it's important to keep space reasonably clean, but nobody can be tidy all all the time.

✓ I don't think so. I think it's important to keep the space reasonably clean, but nobody can be tidy all the time.

Remove duplicated 'all', add the definite article 'the' before 'space' to be specific. 'All the time' is correct phrase; duplicate word is an error. Suggestion: Watch for repeated words when speaking and include articles for specific nouns.