Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Avoid repetition and grammar errors (e.g., use 'my things are' not 'I like to use my things').

예시: Yes, I like to keep things tidy. I organize my belongings into boxes and shelves so I can find items quickly, and I clean surfaces weekly to keep everything looking neat.

제안: Give a direct answer and explain clearly with specific details and connectors. Fix tense and articles (say 'when I was a child'). Avoid unclear phrases like 'shared SH showroom'.

예시: No, I didn't. When I was a child I shared a room with my brother, and he was quite messy, so our room was often untidy. As a result, I didn't bother tidying much at that time.

제안: Use a clear present-tense description and give concrete routines with linking words. Correct verb forms and complete the example sentence.

예시: I keep my study space tidy by designating a specific desk for work and following a simple routine: tidy my desk for five minutes before I start, put away notes after study, and wipe the surface at the end of the day.

제안: State your opinion directly and support it with reasons and a short example. Improve grammar (e.g., 'in a clean area I can think more clearly and find things easily'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

예시: Yes, I think being tidy is necessary because in a clean area I can think more clearly and concentrate better. For example, when my desk is organized I save time looking for materials and work more efficiently.

× Yes, I think so. I like to use my things. Stuff is always clean, is satisfied for me and I always organize my stuff.

✓ Yes, I think so. I like to use my things. My stuff is always clean, which satisfies me, and I always organize it.

Original contains awkward phrasing and incorrect adjective/adverb use: 'Stuff is always clean, is satisfied for me' is ungrammatical. Replaced with 'My stuff is always clean, which satisfies me' to use correct adjective form and structure. Also replaced the second 'my stuff' with 'it' to avoid repetition and improve fluency. Suggestion: use relative clauses ('which satisfies me') and pronouns ('it') to make sentences natural.

× No, I didn't, because when I was child I used to. Shared SH showroom with my brother and my brother was little dirty for example.

✓ No, I didn't, because when I was a child I used to share a small room with my brother, and my brother was a little messy, for example.

Multiple tense and article errors: 'when I was child' needs the article 'a' and past continuous/used-to context requires 'I used to share' rather than fragment 'I used to.' 'Shared SH showroom' is unclear; likely 'shared a small room' fits meaning. 'little dirty' is incorrect adjective order and word choice; 'a little messy' is natural. Suggestions: include articles ('a child'), use 'used to' with base verb, and choose appropriate adjective ('messy').

× I make a separate place and made a routine for before work or study.

✓ I make a separate place and have made a routine for before work or study.

Tense inconsistency: the sentence mixes present 'make' and past 'made.' To express an ongoing habit with a change completed in the past, use present perfect 'have made.' Alternatively, use both present simple ('I make... and make a routine') for consistency. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent when listing habits or actions.

× For example, I always when I study or working umm.

✓ For example, I always tidy my space when I study or work.

Original is fragmentary and mixes forms: 'I always when I study or working' lacks a main verb and mixes gerund and base form. The corrected sentence adds a clear verb 'tidy my space' and uses parallel verbs 'study or work.' Suggestion: ensure each clause has a subject and a finite verb and keep parallel structure in lists.

× Yes, I think so because umm when clean area is think more clearly and find it very easily to.

✓ Yes, I think so because when my area is clean I can think more clearly and find things very easily.

Problems: missing possessive ('my area'), incorrect word order ('when clean area is'), wrong verb forms ('is think more clearly'), and awkward final phrase ('find it very easily to'). Correction restores natural English: 'when my area is clean I can think more clearly and find things very easily.' Suggestion: use subject-verb order, include necessary possessives, and use modal 'can' for ability.