Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler sounds, correct grammar (e.g., 'in their place', 'I do not like mess'), and limit to 2–3 sentences. Add one specific reason or brief example to support your statement using a linking word.

예시: Yes, I do like to keep my things tidy because I prefer everything to be in its place and easy to find. For example, I always arrange my books and stationery on my desk so I can work more efficiently.

제안: Answer directly and clearly. Correct tense and vocabulary (use 'Did you use to' -> past habits). Say whether you kept it tidy and provide a brief reason or example. Avoid unclear phrases and fillers.

예시: Not really; when I was a child my mother usually cleaned and organised my room, so I wasn't very interested in tidying up myself. As a result, my toys and school books were often arranged by her.

제안: Be structured and concise: state your routine clearly with correct word order and tense. Use linking words (for example, 'every day', 'also', 'then') and specific actions (e.g., 'wipe the desk', 'file papers', 'use drawer organisers'). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Every day I wipe my desk and put my books back on the shelf so the study area stays neat. I also keep pens in a holder and clean the drawers once a week to remove clutter.

제안: Give a clear opinion with a reason and one short example. Avoid fillers and repetition; use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'. Correct grammar and collocation (e.g., 'a good environment at home', 'others praise our home').

예시: Yes, I think being tidy is important because an organized home creates a calm environment for work and relaxation. For example, when my living room is clean, I can focus better and guests often compliment how neat it looks.

× I like to keep my things tidy because I I love to place things on their place so I not like the any type of messes.

✓ I like to keep my things tidy because I love to put things in their place, so I do not like any kind of mess.

Original sentence has multiple issues: redundant 'I' and awkward passive phrasing 'place things on their place'. This is not passive but uses wrong verb and word order. Correction uses active verbs 'put' and 'do not like' and 'any kind of mess' for natural English.

× So tidiness is a very important for me.

✓ So tidiness is very important to me.

The phrase 'a very important' is incorrect because 'important' after 'is' as an adjective does not need an article. Use 'very important to me' for correct adjective use and preposition.

× Well, I don't remember you so much, but always my mother clean my room and organise my all the toys and all my academics books.

✓ Well, I don't remember very much, but my mother always cleaned my room and organized all my toys and my school books.

The speaker refers to past habitual actions, so past tense 'cleaned' and 'organized' should be used instead of present 'clean'/'organise'. Also word order improved: 'my mother always cleaned', 'all my toys and my school books'.

× So I think I don't even interested in the Titaness at that time.

✓ So I think I wasn't even interested in tidiness at that time.

Referring to past state requires past form 'wasn't' rather than present 'don't'. Also 'Titaness' is a misspelling of 'tidiness'. Use 'interested in tidiness'.

× Uh, well, umm, on the daily basis as clean my, uh, table where I usually study and also, I, uh, uh, put all the, uh, books in the organized space as well as there are pen pencils standard there in my table and all the drawers I cleaned weekly and.

✓ On a daily basis I clean the table where I usually study, I put all the books in an organized space, the pens and pencils are on my table, and I clean all the drawers weekly.

Several tense and structure errors: use simple present 'I clean' for habitual actions. 'On the daily basis' should be 'on a daily basis'. Avoid redundant fillers. Use clear clauses joined by commas and conjunctions. 'Pen pencils standard' corrected to 'pens and pencils are on my table'.

× Yes, it's definitely, uh, necessary to tidy because, uh, uh, if the things are organized and clean and, uh, we get a good environment in at, uh, home.

✓ Yes, it's definitely necessary to be tidy because if things are organized and clean, we have a better environment at home.

Use 'to be tidy' or 'to tidy' correctly; here 'to be tidy' fits. Replace 'we get a good environment in at home' with 'we have a better environment at home'. Remove filler words and fix word order.

× So also other one praises are home if we clean our, uh, home and.

✓ Also, other people will praise our home if we keep it clean.

Original has incorrect pronouns and word order: 'other one praises are home' is ungrammatical. Use 'other people will praise our home' and 'keep it clean' for clarity and correct pronoun reference.