Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 답변이 의도는 분명하지만 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 있어 점수가 낮아집니다. 주제 문장으로 바로 답하고 이어서 구체적 이유와 행동을 간결하게 제시하세요. 연결어(therefore, so, because)를 사용해 문장 흐름을 자연스럽게 하고, 3~5문장 이내로 답을 유지하세요. 예: 자신이 정리를 좋아하지만 능력이 부족해 유튜브로 배우고 여유시간에 실천한다는 점을 분명히 하세요.

예시: Yes, I like to keep things tidy. However, I'm not very good at organizing my belongings, so I watch YouTube videos to learn practical tips. Therefore, I try to apply those tips during my spare time to improve gradually.

제안: 답변이 반복적이고 문법/어순 오류가 있습니다. 과거 습관을 묻는 질문이므로 'used to' 구조나 과거 빈도 표현을 명확히 사용하세요. 부모의 영향을 설명할 때 불필요한 반복을 줄이고 구체적 빈도와 이유를 덧붙이세요.

예시: Yes, I used to. When I was a child I lived with my parents, who were very organized, so I cleaned my room at least once a week. Their rules and example helped me develop that habit.

제안: 답변이 분명하지 않고 문장이 불완전합니다. 질문에는 구체적인 방법(예: 정리, 정기적인 청소, 수납 이용)을 2~3가지로 나눠서 명확한 연결어(with, first, second)를 사용해 설명하세요. 각 방법마다 간단한 이유나 예시를 포함하면 좋습니다.

예시: I keep my study space tidy in two main ways. First, I regularly throw away or recycle items I no longer need to avoid clutter. Second, I limit new purchases and use boxes and shelves to store my stationery neatly.

제안: 의견은 명확하지만 표현이 어색하고 논리가 약합니다. 질문에는 직접적인 주제문을 먼저 말하고, 이유와 예를 두세 문장으로 뒷받침하세요. 모호한 표현('I think try to be tidy') 대신 명확한 문장('I think being tidy is necessary')을 사용하세요.

예시: Yes, I believe being tidy is necessary. It helps me focus and feel less stressed, especially when I study or work. For example, if I lived alone abroad, keeping my place clean would help me stay organized and comfortable.

× Yes I do, however I think I'm not good at organizations for my stuff so I watch a lot of YouTube videos for how can I organize myself well and I try to do it when I have my spare time.

✓ Yes, I do. However, I think I'm not good at organizing my stuff, so I watch a lot of YouTube videos on how I can organize myself better, and I try to do it when I have spare time.

Adjective/adverb misuse and word form: 'organizations' should be the gerund 'organizing' to describe the activity. 'for my stuff' is awkward; use 'my stuff'. 'for how can I organize myself well' has incorrect word order and preposition; use 'on how I can organize myself better'. 'well' is less natural than 'better' in comparative context. Also sentence needs punctuation and clause separation for clarity. Suggested improvement: use correct verb forms (gerunds) after 'good at', use 'on how' for tutorials, use natural adverb 'better', and split into shorter sentences.

× Yes I did because when I was younger I usually lived with my parents and my parents want to keep my room tidy because I think there are well organized person.

✓ Yes, I did, because when I was younger I usually lived with my parents and my parents wanted to keep my room tidy because I think they were well-organized people.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun/adjective form: 'parents want' should be past tense 'wanted' to match 'when I was younger'. 'there are well organized person' is incorrect: 'there are' mismatches singular 'person'; correct is 'they were well-organized people' using pronoun and plural noun. Also use hyphen in 'well-organized'. Suggested improvement: ensure tense consistency and match singular/plural forms; refer to parents with 'they' and plural noun 'people'.

× So I cleaned my room more than once a week to maintain a clean state of my room.

✓ So I cleaned my room more than once a week to maintain it in a clean state.

Redundant noun phrase and preposition use: repeating 'my room' is unnecessary; use pronoun 'it'. 'to maintain a clean state of my room' is awkward; 'to maintain it in a clean state' is more natural. Ensure singular/plural consistency by using pronoun for previously mentioned singular noun. Suggested improvement: avoid repeating nouns; use pronouns to refer back to subjects.

× I think there are two things to make my study space tidy.

✓ I think there are two things I do to make my study space tidy.

Original sentence structure is incomplete: 'two things to make' lacks subject performing actions. Adding 'I do' clarifies who acts. No plural error but sentence structure needed improvement. Suggested improvement: include subject and verb for clarity: 'two things I do' or 'two ways to'.

× First, I trash away from that.

✓ First, I take out the trash.

Awkward phrasing and incorrect verb usage: 'trash away from that' is not idiomatic. Use 'take out the trash' or 'throw things away'. Suggested improvement: use common collocations like 'throw away', 'discard', or 'take out the trash'.

× I didn't I don't I don't use well because I think a lot of stuff make my space messy and the other thing is don't buy I tried to not.

✓ I don't use many things because I think a lot of stuff makes my space messy, and the other thing is I try not to buy unnecessary items.

Multiple issues: tense inconsistency ('didn't I don't I don't'), subject-verb agreement ('a lot of stuff make' should be 'a lot of stuff makes'), and sentence fragments ('the other thing is don't buy I tried to not'). Correct by choosing present tense 'don't' to match general habit, fix subject-verb agreement, and reorder to 'I try not to buy unnecessary items'. Suggested improvement: decide on correct tense for habitual actions (present simple), ensure verb agrees with singular collective noun 'stuff', and use clear infinitive phrasing 'try not to buy'.

× Yes, I think try to be tidy is necessary for my life because as I mentioned before, I think I'm not well organization person.

✓ Yes, I think trying to be tidy is necessary in my life because, as I mentioned before, I think I'm not a well-organized person.

Gerund use: after 'I think' the noun phrase should use gerund 'trying' when referring to the action. 'not well organization person' is wrong form; use adjective 'well-organized' and add article 'a'. Suggested improvement: use gerund forms for actions as nouns and correct adjective forms with appropriate articles.

× However, if I live alone in other country, uh, I think making my place clean is very important to.

✓ However, if I live alone in another country, I think keeping my place clean will be very important, too.

Preposition and modal/tense: 'in other country' should be 'in another country'. Ending 'important to' is incomplete; use 'important, too' or 'very important as well'. Also adjust tense/modal: if hypothetical future, 'will be' fits. 'making my place clean' could be 'keeping my place clean' for ongoing state. Suggested improvement: use 'another country', complete comparison words like 'too', and match tense to hypothetical situations (use 'will be').