Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity, grammar and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct vocabulary (e.g., “tidy” not “trade”), remove repetitions, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I do. I find that a tidy bedroom helps me feel relaxed and more focused when I study. For example, I organize my desk and books every evening so I can quickly find materials the next day, which saves time and reduces stress.

제안: Make the answer direct and use past simple correctly. Give one clear reason and a short example. Use linking words like “because” to connect clauses and avoid filler words like “uh.” Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Not really. When I was a child I often didn’t tidy my room because I was too tired after school. For instance, I usually left my books and clothes on the floor until the weekend.

제안: Clarify meaning and correct word choice (e.g., “tidy” or “a tidy environment” instead of “Teddy”/“treaty”). Describe specific habits and use linking words to show sequence or purpose. Limit to 3–4 concise sentences.

예시: I keep my study space tidy by using labeled folders and a small shelf for books, so everything has a place. As a result, I can find items quickly and the tidy environment helps me concentrate and makes a good impression on visitors.

제안: Fix vocabulary (“tidy” not “Teddy”), begin with a clear opinion, then give two concise, specific reasons using linking words like “because” or “for example.” Keep it natural and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I do. Being tidy is important because a clean workspace helps me relax and focus. For example, when colleagues visit for a meeting, a neat office creates a professional impression.

× Tidy, Yes, definitely. I feel more relaxed and focused in a trade environment so I I organize my things regularly, especially my bedroom at This makes it easier to find my books and other sturdy material and helps me consider when I study.

✓ Yes, definitely. I feel more relaxed and focused in a tidy environment, so I organize my things regularly, especially my bedroom. This makes it easier to find my books and other study materials and helps me concentrate when I study.

This sentence has multiple sentence structure and word-choice problems (Grammar problem type ID 26). 'trade environment' is incorrect word choice; 'tidy environment' fits the context. There is a duplicated word 'I I' and a misplaced fragment 'at'. 'sturdy material' is wrong for study context; correct is 'study materials'. 'helps me consider' should be 'helps me concentrate'. Suggestions: remove duplicate words, split run-on into two sentences with proper connectors, choose accurate vocabulary ('tidy', 'study materials', 'concentrate'), and ensure logical sequence of clauses.

× Well, it depended on my mood when I was young I didn't bother myself to meet and clean my room due to fact is when I was came back to home from school. So, uh, I was a little bit tired so that's why I didn't.

✓ Well, it depended on my mood when I was young. I didn't bother to clean my room because when I came home from school I was a little tired, so I often didn't.

This contains past-tense and sentence structure errors (Grammar problem type ID 5 and 26). 'didn't bother myself to meet and clean' is ungrammatical; correct pattern is 'didn't bother to clean'. 'due to fact is' is incorrect; use 'because'. 'when I was came back to home from school' mixes tenses and word order; correct is 'when I came home from school'. Suggestions: use simple past consistently, remove unnecessary reflexive 'myself', use clear causal connector 'because', and correct verb forms and word order.

× Teddy helps me to stay organized or find something easier. Whatever. The treaty environment makes me calm and focused. It also gives a good impression on people.

✓ Tidiness helps me stay organized and find things more easily. A tidy environment makes me calm and focused. It also gives a good impression to people.

This has incorrect words and pronoun/word choice issues (Grammar problem type ID 12). 'Teddy' and 'treaty' are wrong words—likely intended 'tidy' or 'tidiness'. 'find something easier' should be 'find things more easily'. 'gives a good impression on people' should be 'gives a good impression to people' or 'makes a good impression on others'. Suggestions: use correct nouns ('tidiness'), use adverb 'more easily' for the verb 'find', and use the correct prepositional phrase 'impression on/ to others'.

× Yes, I think being Teddy is necessary. A neat and clean environment helps me to relax and focus when I work. It also creates positive impression on others, for instance when my colleagues come or for meetings or dinner.

✓ Yes, I think being tidy is necessary. A neat and clean environment helps me relax and focus when I work. It also creates a positive impression on others, for instance when my colleagues come over or for meetings or dinners.

This contains incorrect word choice and article use (Grammar problem type ID 13 and 22). 'Teddy' is a wrong adjective; correct is 'tidy'. 'helps me to relax' is acceptable, but 'helps me relax' is more natural. 'creates positive impression' lacks the article 'a'. 'come' needs 'come over' or 'visit', and 'dinner' as a general activity should be pluralized or preceded by article depending on context. Suggestions: replace wrong adjective with 'tidy', include articles where necessary ('a positive impression'), use natural verb forms, and adjust nouns for count/number.