Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は明確で理由と具体例も述べられており良いですが、次の点を改善してください：1) 冗長な表現（例："for example"の重複）を避ける。2) 文のつながりをはっきりさせるために接続詞（because, so, therefore, beforeなど）を効果的に使う。3) 語彙を少し広げて自然さを増す（例えば tidy の代わりに organised, neat を使う）。4) 文の数を3〜4文に収め、簡潔にまとめる。

예시: Yes, I like to keep things tidy because a cluttered space makes me feel distracted. For instance, I always clear my desk before studying English so I can focus better. Keeping my study area organised also helps me find materials quickly and saves time.

제안: 回答の内容は分かりますが、混乱や非流暢さがあり、理由の説明が不完全です。改善点：1) ためらい語（uh）を減らして自信を示す。2) 記憶が曖昧ならその旨を簡潔に述べ、具体的なエピソードを一つ加える。3) 文法と語順を整え、理由をきちんと完結に述べる（"because"の後を完結させる）。

예시: I'm not completely sure, but I think I usually kept my room tidy as a child. I remember my mother often asked me to tidy my toys every evening, so I got used to putting things away before bed.

× Yes I do, because if my surroundings are not tidy I feel a bit uncomfortable.

✓ Yes, I do, because if my surroundings are not tidy I feel a bit uncomfortable.

No major grammatical error; added a comma after 'Yes' for natural spoken punctuation. Ensure present simple correctly used for general truths.

× So for example I usually try to clean up my desk before starting learning English or other subjects for example.

✓ So, for example, I usually try to clean up my desk before I start learning English or other subjects.

The phrase 'starting learning' is incorrect. Use 'start learning' or 'begin learning'. Also add commas for clarity and remove the repeated 'for example'.

× Uh, actually I can't fully remember but I guess I did tidy up my room when I was a kid.

✓ Uh, actually I can't fully remember, but I guess I did tidy up my room when I was a kid.

Tense usage is acceptable (modal 'did' to refer to past habit). Added a comma before 'but' for correct sentence structure.

× I clearly remember my mother told me to clean up my room because she thought if I did.

✓ I clearly remember my mother telling me to clean up my room because she thought I should.

The original sentence ends with an unfinished conditional 'because she thought if I did', which is ungrammatical. Use 'telling me' (reported speech) or 'told me' with a complete complement. 'She thought I should' completes the idea and keeps past reference.