Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문법과 표현을 자연스럽게 고치고 문장을 간결하게 만들 필요가 있습니다. 특히 동사 시제와 주어-동사 일치, 관용적 표현(예: "keep things tidy", "keep my space clean"), 그리고 연속 동사 형태 대신 연결어를 사용해 문장을 매끄럽게 연결하세요. 예를 들어 불필요한 반복을 줄이고 한두 개의 구체적 예시(어떤 물건을 정리하는지, 얼마나 자주 청소하는지)를 추가하면 답변이 더 구체적이고 자연스럽습니다.

예시: Yes, I like to keep things tidy because a clean space helps me focus. For example, I neatly arrange my books and put away clothes every evening, and I usually clean my room thoroughly once a week.

제안: 모호한 표현과 반복을 줄이고 과거 습관을 나타내는 표현을 정확히 사용하세요. "I used to"나 "When I was a child" 같은 표현으로 시작해 과거 상황을 분명히 하고, 구체적인 예(예: 부모님이 도와주셨는지, 장난감 정리 습관 등)를 덧붙이면 좋습니다. 또한 문법적으로 올바른 형식(예: "I wanted my space to be clean")으로 고치세요.

예시: I'm not sure I remember exactly, but I used to like keeping my room tidy when I was a child. For instance, I would always put my toys back in their boxes and make my bed every morning because I liked my room to feel comfortable.

× Yes, I always tidy because I want my space is clear so I usually arrange my products and cleaning my room.

✓ Yes, I always tidy because I want my space to be clear, so I usually arrange my things and clean my room.

The sentence has multiple issues: a missing infinitive construction ('want my space to be clear' required rather than 'want my space is clear'), incorrect verb form parallelism ('arrange my products and cleaning my room' should use parallel verbs: 'arrange my things and clean my room'), and word choice ('products' is odd for personal items; 'things' is more natural). Suggestion: use 'want + object + to + base verb' and keep verbs parallel in a list.

× Actually I, I don't remember exactly but I think I always, I always want my space is my space to be clean and comfortable.

✓ Actually, I don't remember exactly, but I think I always wanted my space to be clean and comfortable.

The original mixes present and past reference incorrectly. When talking about childhood habits in response to 'Did you use to...', use past tense ('wanted') or 'used to want'. Also 'want my space is' is ungrammatical; use the infinitive 'want my space to be'. Suggestion: use past tense for past habits and the structure 'want + object + to + verb'.