Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答を簡潔で文法的に正しくし、繰り返しや「uh」を減らすこと。主題文で過去の好みを明確に述べ、その後で理由や具体例を一つ付け加えると自然に聞こえます。例えば時制（過去形）を統一し、「we can enjoy running and cheering」ではなく、子どもの頃にした具体的な活動を挙げると説得力が増します。

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played tag and climbed trees there, which helped me make friends and stay active.

제안: 答えを重複せずに一文で明確に表現し、現在の習慣について具体的な頻度や目的を示すと良いです。無意味な繰り返しやためらい言葉（uh）を減らし、頻度を表す表現（sometimes, often, usually）と活動内容を繋げて述べてください。

예시: Yes, I still enjoy parks. I often go there in the afternoons to study English and relax, because the atmosphere is quiet and inspiring.

제안: 文法（主語と動詞の一致、時制）を直し、理由を一つか二つの具体的な点で述べると良いです。例えば「my city doesn't have much green space」のように自然な表現にして、健康や環境への利点を付け加えると説得力が高まります。

예시: Yes, I would like more parks because my city lacks green space. More parks would improve air quality and give residents places to exercise and relax.

제안: 繰り返しや無駄な言葉を省き、理由を具体的に述べてください。例えばその建築家のどんな作品や特徴に惹かれるのか、またその公園で何を見たいか（景観、デザイン、施設など）を付け加えると説得力が増します。

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the park in Toyosu because it was designed by my favorite architect. I'm especially interested in the park's modern layout and unique structures, and I hope to see how the design integrates with the waterfront.

× I like going to, uh, I like to going to a park as a child and now I like to going to park because, uh, we, we can enjoy, we can enjoy running and, uh, cheering.

✓ I liked going to a park as a child, and now I like going to parks because we can enjoy running and cheering.

The sentence mixes forms and tenses. Use 'liked' (past simple) for childhood habitual action and 'like' (present) for current habit; 'like to going' is incorrect — choose 'like to go' or 'like going'; pluralize 'park' to 'parks' when speaking generally. Remove filler repetitions and extra commas. Suggestion: Use consistent tense for time references and choose either 'like to V' or 'like V-ing'. Use plural when referring generally to parks.

× Yes, I still like parks. I still like going to parks. Uh, sometimes I, I, I, I go, I go to park and uh, I study English and uh.

✓ Yes, I still like parks. I still like going to parks. Sometimes I go to a park and study English.

Remove repeated fillers and correct article usage: 'go to park' should be 'go to a park' for a single, non-specific park. Also combine coordinated actions: 'go to a park and study English.' Suggestion: Omit unnecessary repetitions and use 'a' before singular countable nouns when not specific.

× I would like to see more parks because my city don't have any greens so I wish I I wish there are many parks.

✓ I would like to see more parks because my city doesn't have any green spaces, so I wish there were many parks.

Use 'doesn't' for third-person singular subject 'my city' (subject-verb agreement). 'Greens' is unnatural; 'green spaces' is idiomatic. For hypothetical wishes about current reality, use subjunctive/conditional 'I wish there were' not 'are'. Remove repeated 'I'. Suggestion: Use 'doesn't' with singular subjects and 'wish there were' for unreal present situations.

× I want to go to go to the park in Toyosu. It's it created by my favorite architect. So I want to see the this park and yes.

✓ I want to go to the park in Toyosu. It was created by my favorite architect, so I want to see this park.

Remove duplicate 'go to'. 'It's it created' is incorrect: use past simple passive 'It was created' to describe a completed action. Remove redundant 'the' before 'this park'. Suggestion: Use past passive (was created) to describe who designed or built a place and avoid duplicate words and extra articles.